"Life is the dancer and you are the dance."
Eckhart Tolle

Tuesday, March 1, 2011

"Unconscious Thoughts" One Shot Wednesday #35

Can’t place my heart inside a crystal glass
when flying singed edges need repair
Form is lost … changed 
Tin cans line streets
emerged with toxic waste
Forge a place of humanity
where furnaces never cease
Chase ghosts as they hide in
unseen corridors

Can’t place my soul inside a wooden box
while sliding on slippery pitches
Shape is found …regained
Plastic-filled waterways
choking out life
Consciousness of others lost
when the sun burns hardest
Pursuit of demons is forever
in scorched open fields

There’s a tree that leaves me
gloomy, while waiting for the night


  1. A haunting write on how we pollute this beautiful place, choking out life...choking out beauty and our future as a species....well done Pam...bkm

  2. An engaging barrage of imagery coming at us here - gives the senses a bit of a smack, especially when we reel back to see the gloomy portrait painted for us of our world...and are left to ponder our hand in it. Strong piece, well written.

  3. Flaubert you are a wordsmith.

    I can send you snow if you wish...soothing.

  4. This almost made me feel out of breath myself. I could feel the suffocation. Your word choices are strong.

  5. Pam, so many strong images to contemplate.

  6. it made me feel rather sad...the pain and even the somberness of the tree...excellent evocation of emotion...

  7. It's the time we're in, I think--if you look with any attention at the world, the night that's coming seems long and foreboding. Excellent piece, pamela.

  8. great oneshot and calling a spade a spade. we're distroying the very home we're supposed to love. . .go figure :)

    Monty / bummy

  9. Very nice, Ollie and I'll pass on the snow, but
    thanks just the same.

  10. It is such a mess that we have created, Mary.

  11. I didn't mean to make you feel sad, Brian.

  12. Joy Ann, I often think about our children. What
    will they have to deal with, when we are long gone.

  13. A bit of an oxymoron, wouldn't say, Monty?

  14. That tree at the end is my favorite part.

    Nice One Shot, Pam!

  15. Makes you wonder about humanity, we get kicked out of eden, then turn the world into a ghetto. Great poem - Brendan

  16. Liked this a lot: the flow, the images, etc. Effective work.

  17. It does make one wonder, Brendan.

  18. Oh maaannn... that was a super reflective piece, Pamela!! So beautiful written!!
    Each line made me pause, wonder...and relate to!!

    Really wonderful!

  19. Moving and sad and oh so true. Pensive quality. The final stanza is perfect. Memorable.

  20. placing soul and heart in boxes and glasses...interesting thoughts..and very heartfelt write

  21. Pamela - wow! Each time I visit your site, I am newly amazed at just how talented you are! Those last two lines are so haunting!

  22. Yes, Jamie it is very true and people who make
    light of it are fools.

  23. Thanks for the visit, Claudia.

  24. RJ, you are way too kind.
    I appreciate your kind words.

  25. Its a wondrful post and your last line made me sit up and read again.. so powerful and vivid image...
    While waiting for the night...

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