"Life is the dancer and you are the dance."
— Eckhart Tolle

Thursday, March 31, 2011

Sunshine or Rain Poets United Thursday Think Tank #42-Love

When it’s right all calmness proceeds in life,
puzzles fit together perfectly,
blue skies fill the picture,
billow-shaped clouds are soft,
inviting you to relax
But when it’s wrong everything is turned upside down,
nothing seems to work,
gears are broken,
rusty sprockets grind,
dark, menacing skies fill your days,
torrential downpours,
lightning bolts smashing at your feet,
everyone’s frowning,
put on scowls for more misery
Like a stab to the core … when love doesn’t work
Posted by flaubert at 4:12 PM

15 comments:

  1. RJ ClarkenMarch 31, 2011 at 4:22 PM

    I love how you turned this poem around - especially as I didn't see the ending coming! Your metaphoric examples were really well-drawn, too!

    And yep - I'm planning on taking part in NaPoWriMo - so we can cheer each other on! ☼

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  2. flaubertMarch 31, 2011 at 4:33 PM

    Thanks RJ, here's to cheerleading! Yay!

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  3. Sherry Blue SkyMarch 31, 2011 at 4:58 PM

    Oh so true.........I like the first kind best, hee hee! Well done, Pamela.

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  4. flaubertMarch 31, 2011 at 6:25 PM

    Yes, the first is ideal, but certainly not realistic, Sherry.

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  5. Brian MillerMarch 31, 2011 at 7:08 PM

    oh but i want love to work...i am a hoeful romantic afterall...

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  6. flaubertMarch 31, 2011 at 7:25 PM

    Most of us do, Brian:)

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  7. ElizabethMarch 31, 2011 at 8:10 PM

    Love just has to work harder when everything is dark. Love your choice of images and comparisons,

    Elizabeth

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  8. EllaMarch 31, 2011 at 8:57 PM

    Great prose; I almost went with lightening and blue skies, but chose the sea instead! I love the grinding gears, such great imagery! Well Done~

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  9. Celestial DreamzMarch 31, 2011 at 9:30 PM

    so well done ... a contrast is brought out very perfect.

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  10. Madeleine Begun KaneMarch 31, 2011 at 11:02 PM

    Well said, and oh so true. And in response to your question posted on my blog, I live in New York City (Bayside, Queens) and grew up on Long Island (Massapequa Park).

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  11. madhumakhiApril 1, 2011 at 4:05 AM

    I like the way you've described 'love' gone wrong. Yes, what we love the most hurts us most, cuz love is what we are made of.
    "nothing seems to work,
    gears are broken,
    rusty sprockets grind,
    dark, menacing skies fill your days,
    torrential downpours,
    lightning bolts smashing at your feet,
    everyone’s frowning,
    put on scowls for more misery
    Like a stab to the core … when love doesn’t work"
    Excellent lines.

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  12. Sherry IrvineApril 1, 2011 at 5:41 AM

    I love both sides of your piece....love is wonderful when it works and when it doesn't it presents gifts....xo

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  13. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis HallApril 1, 2011 at 9:06 AM

    well captured love,

    it is like Heaven and Earth, lovers have roller coaster rides...

    beautiful entry.

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  14. flaubertApril 2, 2011 at 1:44 PM

    Thanks, Elizabeth, Ella, CD, Madeleine, Madhuma, Sherry and Jingle for the generous comments.

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  15. Kerry O'ConnorApril 2, 2011 at 4:43 PM

    Both sides of love shown with a masterly touch.

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