"Life is the dancer and you are the dance."
— Eckhart Tolle

Wednesday, March 16, 2011

"The Muse" we write poems #45-against the grain

Gone are times of hysterical madness
Gone are folds of resistance that crease and leave me bent,
unable to stand up against its rage

Gone are reflections of the tarnished or diminished
Gone are scraps of paper holding truths not to be revealed
to anyone, anywhere

Gone are simplifications of enormous magnitude
Gone are stories of supplication’s fear in unknown
areas of the mind

Gone are watchful days with words running in a line
Gone are fears of moonless nights hiding behind
closed curtains that never open

Gone are clowns who terrify with crooked smiles
Gone are mad hatters with different disguises for
days to come forward
Gone are all these from my sight
Posted by flaubert at 10:21 AM

23 comments:

  1. AnonymousMarch 16, 2011 at 12:26 PM

    I like your first verse, especially the second line, and the repetition works well.

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  2. MarianvMarch 16, 2011 at 3:12 PM

    This is a depressing subject, against the grain.
    old joke: "Get out of the wheat field, Granny, you're going against the grain."

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  3. Sherry Blue SkyMarch 16, 2011 at 6:52 PM

    I like this, Pamela. It sounds like you have discarded a lot of negatives and found clarity........or am I totally off track? Good poem, at any rate!

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  4. Madeleine Begun KaneMarch 16, 2011 at 11:33 PM

    Very powerful.

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  5. vivinfranceMarch 17, 2011 at 3:02 AM

    What is fone is the negative. So you are left with the uplifting positive. I'm glad.

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  6. vivinfranceMarch 17, 2011 at 3:04 AM

    Gone - like my typing skills.

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  7. AnonymousMarch 17, 2011 at 3:36 AM

    I like how it seems negative on first reading but is actually quite positive. Clever.

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  8. gautami tripathyMarch 17, 2011 at 9:58 AM

    I like it. The subtle way i changes the mood.

    an ordinary moment

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  9. flaubertMarch 17, 2011 at 10:41 AM

    Thanks Matt:)

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  10. flaubertMarch 17, 2011 at 10:42 AM

    Marian, there's nothing wrong with getting rid
    of negativity in one's life.

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  11. flaubertMarch 17, 2011 at 10:44 AM

    Exactly on track, Sherry. I have more and more
    clarity each day I live.

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  12. flaubertMarch 17, 2011 at 10:45 AM

    Thanks Madeleine:)

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  13. flaubertMarch 17, 2011 at 10:46 AM

    Ha! Still some, but, so little I don't give it much thought.

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  14. flaubertMarch 17, 2011 at 10:47 AM

    Tilly, glad you saw that.

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  15. flaubertMarch 17, 2011 at 10:47 AM

    Thanks Gautami:)

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  16. MaryMarch 17, 2011 at 11:07 AM

    It is good to dispose of all the negativity one can in one's life! Well done, Pamela.

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  17. ireneMarch 17, 2011 at 7:13 PM

    Wow I feel the words' power. I like.

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  18. flaubertMarch 17, 2011 at 8:47 PM

    It is an excellent accomplishment, if it can be done, Mary.

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  19. flaubertMarch 17, 2011 at 8:47 PM

    Thanks Irene:)

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  20. neil reidMarch 18, 2011 at 1:09 AM

    If this goes against the grain in any way for you Pamela, all I can say like Oliver, bowl in hand, "more please". Wonderfully done. Simple direct statements yet given with a sense of a mystery revealed and lifted (blue sky unspoken is yet obvious). I feel both the child and the adult, both breathing in this poem here. This might just be one of my favorites of your poems Pamela. Thank you so much for writing. ~neil

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  21. AnonymousMarch 18, 2011 at 11:09 AM

    I like the repetition and rhythm present in this piece, which drives home what is lost and gone. Nicely done.

    -Nicole

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  22. flaubertMarch 18, 2011 at 1:25 PM

    Wow, Neil, what an absolutely lovely comment, thanks.

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  23. flaubertMarch 18, 2011 at 1:27 PM

    Repetition is not a strong area for me, so this did go against the grain. Thanks Nicole.

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