I was waiting on you, when the moon came out, you were nowhere around
I was waiting on you
I was waiting on you, in my fear and pain
I was waiting on you, in the morbid rain
I was waiting on you, past the frozen clock
I was waiting on you, where the bus had run, in the days of light
I was waiting on you, near the deepening hole
I was waiting on you, when the sun went down, I was swallowed up
I was waiting on you, but you never came
I was waiting on you, in the morbid rain
I was waiting on you
I love the solemn reminiscing. Lots of emotion in this poem. Very nicely written.
ReplyDeleteThanks much, Ben.
ReplyDeleteThe sense of anguish and anger is brought across very effectively by the chanting repetition. A piece to read aloud.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Dick, it comes from a prompt by Donna V.,
ReplyDeletewhich, I had some difficulty with. It is using
anaphora, I must try doing this again, sometime.
Pamela, this really works - the repetition is like a mantra drumming into my brain!
ReplyDeleteViv, you are much too kind:)
ReplyDeleteI feel like I didn't complete
this prompt successfully.