"Life is the dancer and you are the dance."
— Eckhart Tolle

Friday, March 4, 2011

"Reporter" big tent poetry #43-“read-it-over-someone’s-shoulder” wordle with bonus phrases


There is also the matter of
a typical question that will tangle me up
You smile as if to defy me, I let out a gasp
A flame burns in your boyish heart
like a parade to wake up the hiding world
As you slip one thigh over the other and
proceed to write the story …
Posted by flaubert at 2:26 AM

29 comments:

  1. AnonymousMarch 4, 2011 at 2:36 AM

    This is really sexy take on the prompt.

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  2. vivinfranceMarch 4, 2011 at 3:34 AM

    I like this: a lot

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  3. nanMarch 4, 2011 at 5:40 AM

    Concise, condensed, and full. Nice job.

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  4. Laurie KolpMarch 4, 2011 at 6:55 AM

    Sensual and mysterious... I love it!

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  5. AnonymousMarch 4, 2011 at 7:57 AM

    Love the line "like a parade to wake up the hiding world". And I like that the poem isn't necessarily what it seems to be.

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  6. UnknownMarch 4, 2011 at 9:03 AM

    Oh! The teasing that takes place!

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  7. Linda JacobsMarch 4, 2011 at 9:13 AM

    Writing the story is a perfect and tittilating way to end this!

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  8. MaggieMarch 4, 2011 at 11:45 AM

    Lovely.

    I love your header. Beautiful.

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  9. Raven's Wing PoetryMarch 4, 2011 at 12:59 PM

    You're such a tease.

    I liked the way you worked the words in to your poem this week. I wonder where this will lead.

    -Nicole

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  10. Mike PatrickMarch 4, 2011 at 1:12 PM

    I strive for such brevity, but I can't shut up.

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  11. Tumblewords:March 4, 2011 at 3:02 PM

    A many-layered piece - love it!!

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  12. annell4March 4, 2011 at 3:29 PM

    "As you proceed to write the story" nice!

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  13. RJ ClarkenMarch 4, 2011 at 4:43 PM

    Wow! You managed the words in a whole lot less words than I did - and so well, too! ☼

    Anyway, I really love what you did with this prompt!

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  14. DJ VorreyerMarch 4, 2011 at 5:15 PM

    I like that I don't know what the story is.

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  15. AnonymousMarch 4, 2011 at 7:12 PM

    Very good take on the wordle....last two line...dynamite. Vb

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  16. Fiora D'MestiereMarch 5, 2011 at 12:15 AM

    Eros and the promise of even more story...good for you.

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  17. gautami tripathyMarch 5, 2011 at 2:36 AM

    I like sensual, I like implied eroticism...

    rivulets of space

    Due to Census work for the pas one month, I have not been able to visit and comment. I will be back with a vengeance after a day or two!

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  18. BenMarch 5, 2011 at 10:39 AM

    Very cool to use a word jumble with the poem. "Like a parade to wake up the hiding world." Very cool imagery.

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  19. CathyMarch 6, 2011 at 1:09 PM

    Very sensual yet playful too.

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  20. flaubertMarch 6, 2011 at 3:37 PM

    Thanks to all for the lovely comments.

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  21. AnonymousMarch 6, 2011 at 5:02 PM

    You amaze me, Pamela. So complete and so concise!

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  22. flaubertMarch 6, 2011 at 6:08 PM

    Thanks, Victoria, I like using the words concisely.

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  23. AnonymousMarch 6, 2011 at 7:33 PM

    Delightfully sensual, but also I really like how we're at the same time seeing the middle of something and the beginning of something. A loaded moment.

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  24. flaubertMarch 6, 2011 at 8:14 PM

    Thanks so much, Joseph. Seems these words
    brought out a lot of sensuality with people.
    I can't say that is what I felt, maybe more
    of a defiance:)

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  25. ShariMarch 6, 2011 at 10:04 PM

    Great poem, Pamela. This short poem says a lot! Thanks for the view over the shoulder. Nicely done.

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  26. JamesMarch 7, 2011 at 6:35 PM

    I love the idea of the "typical question" tying up the speaker despite the fact that it's typical. That starts the poem off with a nice sense of the speaker's imbalance.

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  27. flaubertMarch 8, 2011 at 5:59 PM

    Thanks Shari and James:)

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  28. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis HallMarch 10, 2011 at 8:39 PM

    pretty advanced take. love it.

    I did try this time, here is mine:
    http://itistimetothinkformyself.blogspot.com/2011/03/big-tent-poetry-in-55-words.html

    Thanks for reading.

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  29. flaubertMarch 11, 2011 at 3:24 PM

    Thanks Jingle.

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