Lost in a solitary sea,
rise to greet the sunshine,
it soothes a severe heart.
Push aside boulders that block our journey.
We wrap our words round
until they come untied,
littered with forgotten lines like a play
poorly rehearsed and acted.
Each character is defined by their costume,
meticulous shadows hide behind the curtain.
Step lightly into the center,
nuances are enhanced and blinding,
never being able to see
“Shikasta’s” last chapter, first page.
rise to greet the sunshine,
it soothes a severe heart.
Push aside boulders that block our journey.
We wrap our words round
until they come untied,
littered with forgotten lines like a play
poorly rehearsed and acted.
Each character is defined by their costume,
meticulous shadows hide behind the curtain.
Step lightly into the center,
nuances are enhanced and blinding,
never being able to see
“Shikasta’s” last chapter, first page.
"Shikasta" is a novel by Doris Lessing.
"Canopus in Argos" sequence of five
science fiction novels.
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Excellent beginning—full of hope and determination. Reminds me of literary deconstruction in the sense of lines unraveling to draw out nuance. Was caught off guard by the reference at the end, which forced me to learn something new today :) Great challenge response!
ReplyDelete*applause* This is so beautiful!
ReplyDelete'We wrap our words round
until they come untied,
littered with forgotten lines like a play
poorly rehearsed and acted.'
Those were my favorite lines. Just phenomenal!
Adam, I posted this too quickly, forgetting
ReplyDeleteto reference the title, it is a novel by Doris Lessing. Thanks for your kind words.
Thanks, Jane, a bit like real life.
ReplyDeleteYes me to now I have to check out this author and books....each character defined by their costume....love your view on the take and the knowledge you have shared Pam...bkm
ReplyDeleteBarb, Doris published her first novel when she was
ReplyDelete31. She is a noble prize winner. Wonderful writer.
Shikasta is her version of the bible.
ah that last comment sheds even more light on this poem...nicely played... i like the unwinding the knots as well...
ReplyDeleteGood, fun read; distinctive in its references, images, and tone, in comparison to others' offerings this week, including my own.
ReplyDeleteWe wrap our words round
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littered with forgotten lines like a play
poorly rehearsed and acted...
...I agree with Jane Doe...these lines definitely speak...always enjoy reading you.
Beautiful writing. I read Lessing in my younger years - she was a beacon lighting the way.......loved your poem, Pamela!
ReplyDeleteand we learn...this reminds me of...nothing
ReplyDeleteI like that
Peace, hp
thank you for stopping by
oh i esp. love these lines..We wrap our words round
ReplyDeleteuntil they come untied..great
Another masterwork! I too loved the lines, "We wrap our words round/until they come untied,"
ReplyDeleteYour writing is so penetrating!
Thanks, Brian, Steve, dasuntoucha, Sherry, hpicasso, Claudia and RJ, for the nice comments.
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