"Life is the dancer and you are the dance."
— Eckhart Tolle

Friday, February 4, 2011

"Dreams and Realty" big tent poetry #39-wordle

Within the darkening night,
I must be alert and function,
as I hear the bedroom’s door handle rotate …
In a remote state forever resistant to floating
shadows on the wall, from an angle I can’t see.
Not sure if my eyes are playing tricks ... 
the cabinet is moving a blade’s inch across the room …

A call from you downstairs “It’s six o’clock” to the sound
of grinding coffee.
Posted by flaubert at 2:00 AM

40 comments:

  1. AnonymousFebruary 4, 2011 at 4:31 AM

    Very imaginative use of the wordle words, and I love the sign-off lines.
    ViV

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  2. AnonymousFebruary 4, 2011 at 6:19 AM

    Ahh...waking up! I especially like "the cabinet is moving a blade's inch across the room..."

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  3. Elizabeth JohnsonFebruary 4, 2011 at 6:52 AM

    This made me smile - such a change from most of the darker poems inspired by these wordles. Especially liked the part about "grinding coffee" :)

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  4. RJ ClarkenFebruary 4, 2011 at 9:03 AM

    I love your wake up call! Well done - and wow - you used all of the words. Cool!

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  5. gautami tripathyFebruary 4, 2011 at 9:45 AM

    I liked the suspense here...

    tears of the sky fall to the ground

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  6. AnonymousFebruary 4, 2011 at 10:27 AM

    Nice balance between the dread of sleep and the ordinary images of reality.

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  7. JamesFebruary 4, 2011 at 11:38 AM

    Yes, very well done. I like the way you've got the speaker recognizing a need for alertness, yet not being able to act.

    Amazing how much darkness can be dispelled by coffee.

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  8. Dick JonesFebruary 4, 2011 at 12:07 PM

    You've certainly sewed the words seamlessly into this poem, Pamela. Quite an achievement; I only managed two!

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  9. LindaFebruary 4, 2011 at 12:18 PM

    Up to the last two lines I was adrift in suspense mode—loved the ending.

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  10. flaubertFebruary 4, 2011 at 1:11 PM

    Viv, though I was compelled to go dark,
    I decided to lighten up the mood. I am
    glad I did.

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  11. flaubertFebruary 4, 2011 at 1:11 PM

    Thanks Jeanne. I love wordles.

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  12. flaubertFebruary 4, 2011 at 1:13 PM

    Elizabeth I could have written about dark, but I seem to do that too often.

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  13. flaubertFebruary 4, 2011 at 1:14 PM

    RJ, wordles are like a puzzle and I always try
    to make each word fit. It is part of the challenge.

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  14. flaubertFebruary 4, 2011 at 1:14 PM

    Gautami there was some suspense 'til the end:)

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  15. flaubertFebruary 4, 2011 at 1:15 PM

    Donna, sometimes sleep doesn't come to me easily.

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  16. flaubertFebruary 4, 2011 at 1:16 PM

    James, I must have my coffee in the mornings.
    Thanks:)

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  17. flaubertFebruary 4, 2011 at 1:17 PM

    Dick, that is one of the things I love about wordles. Thanks:)

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  18. flaubertFebruary 4, 2011 at 1:18 PM

    Linda, a surprise ending not my usual fanfare.
    Thanks:)

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  19. Laurie KolpFebruary 4, 2011 at 2:40 PM

    Great take on the prompt... I especially like the 4th and 5th lines.

    I love wordles, too.

    ~laurie

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  20. ElizabethFebruary 4, 2011 at 3:47 PM

    I like your description of that moment between sleeping and waking and how disorienting it can be. And really enjoyed the ending. Really good response to the wordle,

    Elizabeth

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  21. Tumblewords:February 4, 2011 at 5:47 PM

    A great merger! Love it...

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  22. RobinFebruary 4, 2011 at 8:30 PM

    That strange time between sleeping and waking, the disorientation--this really resonates. Had this sort of experience just this morning. Great poem, Pamela.

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  23. MaryFebruary 4, 2011 at 8:35 PM

    I enjoyed the ending too. I took it as you were in the middle of some kind of early morning disorientation between sleep and waking, but then were greeted with the 'coffee' wakeup call! I need MY coffee in the A.M. too!

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  24. mareymercyFebruary 4, 2011 at 11:26 PM

    i thought of those Paranormal Activity movies. LOL.

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  25. barbaraFebruary 5, 2011 at 1:40 AM

    Chuckle.
    And so very economical with your words

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  26. nanFebruary 5, 2011 at 7:28 AM

    . . . great phrase "moving a blade's inch." You have captured that space between sleeping and waking very well, and like others, I liked the ending. Dream-state to reality with the grind of a bean.

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  27. christopherFebruary 5, 2011 at 7:54 AM

    Turning Point

    I like to wake before you,
    go downstairs to birds
    as they rustle up
    their grub, and me too. I start
    the coffee for you
    and my tea water
    and think about our latest
    discussion, last night,
    how all is changing.

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  28. AnonymousFebruary 5, 2011 at 1:04 PM

    Pamela, your use of the words was so clever. Yes, you had a bit of suspense (which the words did conjure up) with a surprising resolution.

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  29. DebFebruary 5, 2011 at 4:47 PM

    Good rendition of that between time of awareness & sleep.

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  30. flaubertFebruary 5, 2011 at 6:58 PM

    Me too, Laurie:)

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  31. flaubertFebruary 5, 2011 at 6:59 PM

    Thanks Elizabeth and often I feel this way.

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  32. flaubertFebruary 5, 2011 at 7:04 PM

    Susan thanks:)

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  33. flaubertFebruary 5, 2011 at 7:05 PM

    Robin, it is common for me:)

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  34. flaubertFebruary 5, 2011 at 7:06 PM

    I love my coffee, too, Mary.

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  35. flaubertFebruary 5, 2011 at 7:06 PM

    Ha! ok Twitches ;)

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  36. flaubertFebruary 5, 2011 at 7:08 PM

    Yeah, Barb, economy is the word. This practically
    wrote itself. I only edited one line.

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  37. flaubertFebruary 5, 2011 at 7:09 PM

    The sound of coffee grinding in the morning is
    a wake up call:)

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  38. flaubertFebruary 5, 2011 at 7:09 PM

    Nice one Christopher!

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  39. flaubertFebruary 5, 2011 at 7:11 PM

    I was staying away from the dark, Victoria.

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  40. flaubertFebruary 5, 2011 at 7:11 PM

    Thanks Deb:)

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