"Life is the dancer and you are the dance."
Eckhart Tolle

Monday, February 21, 2011

Empty Lives monday poetry potluck #23-home, temple, sanctum


 Where do they go when no-one wants them
to dirty alleys in a box
or park benches in the rain?
Vacant stares, hopelessness.
A marquee sign reads
“Give love to those
who need it.
No more
thirst.”


process notes:
A nonet has nine lines. The first line has nine syllables, the second line eight syllables, the third line seven syllables, etc... until line nine finishes with one syllable.

25 comments:

  1. Holy cow! Somebody's on a real bender!

    (I don't mean the homeless guy, I mean you with all these posts today! Wow!)

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  2. this is creative and powerful.

    outstanding job!

    Happy Potluck!
    A++

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  3. Eric, I write every day and generally
    post a poem to a prompt daily.
    This is my first poem for today.
    I work part-time, so I have a lot
    of free time.

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  4. Very well done. A heartbreaking image, but gracefully presented. Thanks!!

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  5. Powerful poem and sad, Pamela. I will have to try the form. Sounds interesting.

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  6. A challenging form well-handled.

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  7. Form and meaning are both tightly constructed. Nice write!

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  8. Interesting form and a heart wrenching message. Well done!

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  9. Enjoyed the form. I wrote about homelessness, too. Such a tragic problem.

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  10. great message.. my potluck's here: http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/06/04/metamorphosis/

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  11. I think you chose well with the form for this prompt. It seems apropos. Definitely a powerful poem, with an extraordinary voice.

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  12. Marianne, it is a sad subject.
    Having come from NY, I know all
    about it, too, well.
    It is nice to see you:)

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  13. Dick, I have never written in this form before.

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  14. RJ, read about this form the other day.
    I wanted to give it a try.

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  15. Fantastic flow with such a powerful message

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  16. Wow beautiful poem. And I learned a new kind of poem today, thanks to you :)

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