In
a French
bakery
across the street
scents linger
for some
time
When
there are
aromas
still sweet perfume
memories
held in
thought
I recently saw a fellow poet use this form and decided to give it a whirl.
Thanks for the inspiration, Marianne. If you would like read some lovely
Septolets visit her site: http://herwordsbloomed.blogspot.com/
Marianne said:
PS - When I write septolets, the form is slightly different. I found the form here:
http://www.shadowpoetry.com/resources/wip/types.html
The Septolet is a poem consisting of seven lines containing fourteen words with a break in between the two parts. Both parts deal with the same thought and create a picture.
•Fourteen words
•Seven lines
•Two related stanzas
•Create an image or picture
(seems I missed that 14 words instruction, yikes!)
Thanks Marianne
a French
bakery
across the street
scents linger
for some
time
When
there are
aromas
still sweet perfume
memories
held in
thought
I recently saw a fellow poet use this form and decided to give it a whirl.
Thanks for the inspiration, Marianne. If you would like read some lovely
Septolets visit her site: http://herwordsbloomed.blogspot.com/
Marianne said:
PS - When I write septolets, the form is slightly different. I found the form here:
http://www.shadowpoetry.com/resources/wip/types.html
The Septolet is a poem consisting of seven lines containing fourteen words with a break in between the two parts. Both parts deal with the same thought and create a picture.
•Fourteen words
•Seven lines
•Two related stanzas
•Create an image or picture
(seems I missed that 14 words instruction, yikes!)
Thanks Marianne
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Wonderful form. I will have to try this. I love the poem full of scent and now I'm hungry for pastry!
ReplyDeleteI've never seen this form before. Nicely done.
ReplyDeleteCool form and wonderful little poem!
ReplyDeleteI like this form, Pamela, and will give it a go later today or tomorrow. But you do it honor with imagery that wafts off the page. Nicely done.
ReplyDeleteThe form sets up a dramatic pause on time and ending with thought. Cool effect. Succint capture of the moment.
ReplyDeleteopps. meant "succinct"
ReplyDeletenice...this is spot on...many a place carries a scent that lingers with me...that bring back memories...
ReplyDeleteWow! You painted such a vivid picture with almost no paint! Fantastic.
ReplyDeletevery nice Pam and thank you for the lesson...I am learning so much about poetry from everyone...this is one I still have to try...this is a good month to try them all...bkm
ReplyDeleteI like the call to the senses these wafting whiffs of the words give out, pamela. I've not tried the septolet--the shorter forms are, the more they rack my brains--but you make it look easy here.
ReplyDeleteThese are well constructed, Pamela. You bring the reader to a different setting with smell. It works. Scent is such a driving force.
ReplyDelete~Brenda
I gave this a try.But I haven't the skill to construct such a vivid image with so few words.
ReplyDeleteA simple truth, well told.
ReplyDeleteI like the form.
how true ! oft it is the scent and the aromas that almost always evoke a good or bad memory...splendid thought
ReplyDeleteOh my stars! How did I miss this yesterday? You have created a wonderful piece here, Pamela, redolent with the happy memories of a well-loved place. I can almost smell the delicious bakery aromas wafting on the morning breezes. And thank you for mentioning me! You are so kind!!!
ReplyDeletePS - When I write septolets, the form is slightly different. I found the form here:
ReplyDeletehttp://www.shadowpoetry.com/resources/wip/types.html
The Septolet is a poem consisting of seven lines containing fourteen words with a break in between the two parts. Both parts deal with the same thought and create a picture.
•Fourteen words
•Seven lines
•Two related stanzas
•Create an image or picture
Beautiful poem!
ReplyDeleteHere is my One Shot:
gost of a rose
Septolet? And here I thought it was just a delightfully-arranged poem! :)
ReplyDeleteThat's too much counting for me - if I ever write a septolet (or any other fancy form like that) it will probably be accidental.
I spent just a few days in France in my life, and the bakeries are like nothing that I ever could have dreamed of.
ReplyDeletesummoning now croissants that make the sun rise...
Scent is a banana peel to memory. The smell of fresh-baked bread uses a baguette for a battering-ram. - Brendan
ReplyDeleteThanks to all for the very nice comments on a form I didn't get quite right.
ReplyDeleteWell beyond my skill level, but very enjoyable to read. Thanks, also, for the info. Admire you adventuresome attitude toward your writing. Vb
ReplyDeleteObviously beyond mine, too, vb;)
ReplyDeleteHarder than it looks, I know. This is an excellent one.
ReplyDeleteSo much harder, now I must see, if I can actually incorporate all of the instructions, Dave;)
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