"Life is the dancer and you are the dance."
Eckhart Tolle

Sunday, April 24, 2011

"Fairy Tales" NaPoWriMo #24-Big Tent Prompt-Escape

Cinderella stories perpetually
don’t have happy endings
Locked inside your wooden box,
walls were sturdy, but too constraining

My gown and glass slippers never fit quite right,
something stifling about them, a bit askew as
seams began to split, glass started to breach
Your lies were clever, concealing them for last
I was gulled or merely naive
I found a small opening to peer out through

Prince Charming serves wonders in fairytale scripts
My thoughts were lace-filled gaps I tried to stitch together,
ruffles were roller coaster rides sending me to the bray

I found a loose board one day while you weren’t watching
and drew a map with beautiful configurations,
landscapes only prevailing in my mind,
a view you tried to barricade

Finally I walked away, not a simple chore,
my hands stuffed deep inside my pockets
Now I take my words, throw
them where I may, where I go
Occasionally we pay for our freedom


  1. Very strong throughout, but I really love the last line.

  2. Yeah, we pay for it, but it's worth every penny.

  3. The last verse really takes off. Sails away.

  4. Exquisite use of language.... ....attempts to stitch together " lace filled gaps" imagery does not get much better thsn that. Huge talent!

  5. Wonderful use of words here. I like "My gown and glass slippers never fit right, butlLike Dave, I love the last verse.

  6. I agree with PKP this is beautiful. You string words together and consistently amaze me with strong imager. I love the last stanza.

  7. Brilliant the way you put words together, Pamela! I especially liked: "My thoughts were lace-filled gaps I tried to stitch together," and "ruffles were roller coaster rides." Awesome poem!

  8. I'd have to say every last dime, Stan, and no regrets either.

  9. My what a nice compliment, Pearl.

  10. Aren't some relationships like that, Marianne.
    Nothing seems to fit together quite well.

  11. Two other people already said it, but I must agree, the lines "My thoughts were lace-filled gaps I tried to stitch together," are brilliant. Beautiful writing Pamela!

  12. Great realistic variant of the fairy tale. That last line packs a punch.

  13. Delightful all the way through. I like the dichotomy of sturdy walls "but too constraining". My favorite image: "glass started to breach" - ah, those pesky slippers. Each stanza here is strong and builds on the next, moving the story forward. I love it.

  14. Much like the relationship, Mr. Walker. It became, too much.

  15. Charmingly serious, and seriously charming. Nice job.