"Life is the dancer and you are the dance."
Eckhart Tolle

Saturday, April 23, 2011

Awaiting Your Song NaPoWriMo #23-Syllabic 1-12-1

Eyes
ringed in
yellow, black
plume, you prepare
a nest, twigs and mud,
cavernous home, gather
earthworms, berries and fruits for
you and for your young, a song that
vibrates trees, Turdus Merula knocks
on thresholds, a migratory friend wants
entrance, keepsake of nesting literary
fondness staying year round in Paris … temperate
suits you best, we wait for wings to carry you
back when spring returns, Turdus Merula,
I listen for your song to move the
leaves, an object of affection
as I write these words, always
welcome are your visits
as we meet again,
can you see me,
Merula?
as I
wait

28 comments:

  1. It's often said 'one swallow doesn't make a summer' - but you know the worst of the weather is over...
    Great piece!

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  2. Things are changing now - fast. Where I am anyway.

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  3. All I could think of was the Beatles: "You were only waiting/ for this moment to be free"

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  4. I don't always find that shape poems work well. This one does, one of your best, I think.

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  5. Syllable counting vibes must have flown from you to me this morning, but your words carry beauty...and song. :)

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  6. What an interesting form, Pamela. You rock it in this piece! I'm spending three hours in a car with teenagers, my husband and dogs today. We're driving to my folks' place in the mountains. I may work on one of these during the journey.
    ~Brenda

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  7. I love your use of 'Turdus Merula.' I had to google to know what it was :) This is an interesting form and you have crafted your Syllabic Poem beautifully! I will try it soon. Thank you for the inspiration.

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  8. Such a beautifully gentle poem of nature appreciation, Pamela. I agree with Dave that the form really works!

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  9. Pamela your poem is like a song in itself....nature and it's beautiful birds are such a wonderful inspiration. Hope you are doing well, and that you have a lovely Easter weekend! :-)

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  10. Pamela, it just flows so well - a great blending of words and form - and I like the message of your poem too. I really like that question at the end and "as I / wait".

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  11. yes i think she sees and hears you as you sing these words onto page...

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  12. I like the form. It's difficult to write to a syllable count and still make sense (and good poetry).

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  13. it is a shame if we don't warm up and see some sun Merula may never fly back! This is so soft and sweet I could almost hear it being whispered.

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  14. Thanks Stan, I have had blackbirds on my mind recently.

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  15. Actually that song was going through my head, while writing this, Ron.

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  16. This poem was a real bugger to write, Dave. Thanks.

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  17. Jinksy, I love your etheree and the artwork.

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  18. Brenda, I do like the results, but it was a bit of a pain making it cohesive. This is from a poem I wrote a couple of weeks ago.

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  19. Thanks Mary, as I said it was a bit of a bugger to work with.

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  20. The same to you Carrie, and thanks:)

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  21. Thank you, Brian. I'll be back to one stop after the April madness.

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  22. Tilly, it is not a form, I will be doing again soon.

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  23. Amanda, do you live in a cold part of the country?
    Thanks.

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  24. Ah, I was sorry when you said you wouldn't be doing this again. It reads much like a soft sung melody and as usual, your use of language makes it vivd and evocative.

    Elizabeth

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  25. Glad to hear it, Anthony, you live in a cold part of the world.

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  26. Elizabeth, I am happy with the results, maybe I am starting to get a bit bleary-eyed from posting a poem a day. I'll do one again sometime in the future. Thanks.

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