Moderate - perceptive all by surfaces
Serene - tolerance most effected
Fanatical - petulant with sandpaper moves
Enduring and felt as abrasions on the soul
Not sympathetic - nor kind
Insolent or rude in speech or behavior
Character of capricious ill humor
Hands firmly clutching hips
Feet spread far apart to halter the fall
Boast and exult most times out of reach
Two are exactly like one - nothing too amazing
Too much to bother with – too boring
*I would like to explain this poem a bit.
This is about someone I knew in the past.
Although I never did consider them a friend.
They certainly did leave quite an impression
on me.
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I don't understand all of it, but I have met that posture, and it can belong to some formidable persons
ReplyDeletePamela, like the straight direct voice of this one. Some wonderful lines:
ReplyDeletepetulant with sand paper moves
felt as abrasions on the soul
two are exactly like one
And the twist on the end:
too boring to bother makes for a still moment of wondering.
Elizabeth
Pamela, I have met people that have left a strong impression on me too, and not necessarily favorable! Your poem portrays this. I'd say good it was the past!
ReplyDeleteOh, I'm so glad you explained that it wasn't meant to be you! The Pamela I've grown to know a little is not a bit like that. However, you have written an accomplished poem.
ReplyDelete"Fanatical - petulant with sandpaper moves
ReplyDeleteEnduring and felt as abrasions on the soul". This person certainly knew how to get under the skin, Pamela!
I'm rather glad it was you who knew this person—sandpaper moves sounds too harsh. A great description.
ReplyDeleteI think you have to follow the title of the poem - first Pamela, then someone not considered a friend, and then Pamela's reaction. Fine writing! I've encountered folks like that too! I can sure relate. Excellent!
ReplyDeleteI love the line "Petulant with sandpaper moves"
ReplyDeleteI know someone like this~ I can see them, when I read your words!
Ha! Flaubert rides again!:) Some amazing verbiage up there!
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ReplyDeletePamela
Elizabeth you are much too kind!
ReplyDeleteThanks
Pamela
Mary it does happen sometimes!
ReplyDeletePamela
Thank you Viv.
ReplyDeletePamela
Derrick
ReplyDeleteThat they did.
Pamela
Linda Thanks!
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Diane
ReplyDeleteAgreed we should and thanks!
Pamela
Thank you Ellie!
ReplyDeletePamela
Thanks Sherry!
ReplyDeleteyou flatter me ;)
Pamela
Extremely relatable...a different take but I loved it. Beautifully expressed!! x
ReplyDeleteA little bit buttercup
ReplyDeletethanks!
Pamela
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Thanks for the contribution!
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