Sure I’ll meet you there at six
I really didn’t feel like going
(Thanks just the same)
If I had missed that bus would it have been this way
as I stepped off a platform to transform myself
into another situation surrounding me in this world
I tapped my feet to the sound of
Engines roaring - silver shoes and black tights
While blue bandanas filled up the rooms tied in knots of yesterday
What if I had changed my mind at the last second
Do you think I’d feel specks of crystal lights that flash
round me as I’m consumed eternally
Red Wolf Journal Spring 2014, and a fresh start
10 years ago
Pamela, I really liked this poem. As I began reading it, I thought I knew where it was going (and found myself nodding!) but then it went off in a different direction and I felt myself emotionally chilled by the "specks of crystal lights." Strong writing!
ReplyDeleteQuite frightening how simple decisions can change our lives.
ReplyDeleteI'm wondering if the blue bandanas have something to do with gangland? But you're much too nice a girl for that!
ReplyDeleteIf ifs and ands were pots and pans.....
ReplyDeleteYou found some marvellous words here: "knots of yesterday" etc.
this one got me. It slipped into a dreamscape all my own. Than you.
ReplyDeleteMmmm... small decisions can cause spectacular endings...
ReplyDeleteDerrick good heavens! Gangs! I am terrified of those kind of people. No,I am referring to a handknit Mexican scarf from Oaxaca.
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I also like "tied in knots of yesterday". It stopped me and suggested so many things that I could see those "specks of crystal lights" flashing all around me. Like this one Pamela,
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Wonderful images presented here! Excellently crafted post! =)
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We all feel we have to do things we do not want to. I think we should give ourselves the freedom to decline without an excuse! Wish I'd remember that, LOL. A truly sparkling poem!
ReplyDeleteFinely woven piece!
ReplyDeleteStrong images and evocative words. Beautifully written.
ReplyDeleteHow often I have wondered "if I had missed that bus . . . " Fine images and fine poem.
ReplyDeleteWe always seem to miss that bus. At least I do. Great poem.
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What may have happened had you no missed the bus? Life will keep you guessing, enjoy the ride.
ReplyDeleteWonderful. Love those last lines.
ReplyDeleteMary thanks so much!
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Tilly decisions can be so difficult sometimes!
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Thanks loads Viv!
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Christopher thanks and thanks for visiting!
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Jinksy oh yes they can!
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Thanks Elizabeth! This was an interesting prompt!
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Many thanks Weasel!
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Diane that is so hard for me to do.Thanks!
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Thank you Susan!
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Linda thanks!
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Me too, Nan and thanks!
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Ha! So true Gautami! Thanks for that!
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How right you are Amanda and thanks!
ReplyDeleteThanks for visiting!
Pamela
Deb thanks so much!
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Ah beautiful words my friend :D somehow it amused me in the beginning and wonderful ending this poem have! =D
ReplyDeleteAnd here is a reward for you, time to spread the happiness!
http://riikainfinityy.com/2010/09/11/happy-award-makes-you-happy3/
This seemed quite dreamlike, at the verge of turning into a nightmare...I enjoyed it!
ReplyDeleteI love the way you move from the mundane to the really out-of-the-ordinary: it's at once seamless and shocking.
ReplyDeleteThanks riika and thanks for the award!
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Cynthia thanks for that!
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Elizabeth thank you!
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