"Life is the dancer and you are the dance."
Eckhart Tolle

Wednesday, September 1, 2010

As I fall we write poems #17


Flowered smiles that flee in turbulent times
Sadness flows with definite ease
Superstition not something I adhere to
Karma is part of life but it’s always in perspective
Am I so off-balance just like the stilts
I use to walk high above the crowded lanes
rough and righteous lined with sharp rocks
Tomorrow is another day then I can file my feelings away
Only to fling false pride in the furthest direction

14 comments:

  1. Wow your lines flow Pamela. I do so agree about false pride.

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  2. I agree with Irene, this flows. Especially like the reference to stilts as a means of looking down on others, and the difficulty of using that to move amongst sharp rocks. Really like this, Pamela,

    Elizabeth

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  3. Pamela, there is so much feeling expressed in this poem. I agree with the statement about karma!

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  4. You have some great sound images in this one, Pam.
    Love the line: rough and righteous lined with sharp rocks

    (and I like the ?unintentional? Poem title: as I fall we write poems)

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  5. Pamela, this poem has a lot of depth. Well written!

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  6. OH, I liked this one! Yes, Karma & other, unknown things.
    Nice picture, too
    (hope I can select the right profile)

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  7. This is probably one of my favorite ones of yours I've read so far. As I read it, I sounded it out in my mind and I could hear the alliteration, which gives it a lovely sound. Also, I liked your image of you on stilts. This does have a lot of depth to it, and especially in such a short poem. Well done.

    -Nicole

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  8. First of all, I just love the image in your header.
    I get this...
    "Tomorrow is another day and then I can file my feelings away"
    Sometimes it's easier to file them and not deal.

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  9. Oh, good poem! Love the thought of you walking on stilts above all the hubbub............cool poem!

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  10. Thanks everyone for all the nice comments.
    Pamela

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  11. your words are magical,
    I feel it,
    lovely done!

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  12. Thanks so much Jingle
    Happy weekend!

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