"Life is the dancer and you are the dance."
— Eckhart Tolle

Friday, January 28, 2011

A Song From The Sea big tent poetry #38-did you change your point of view?

 
http://www.flickr.com/photos/georgedonaldson/
model: Emily Franklin

In a daydream you existed
I saw you in the sea,
heard your lonesome cry.
I could never comfort you.
It was long before I saw  
those mystifying eyes,
your pouty mouth, enticing me.
Pearls draped loosely about your neck,
given by another lover, long ago …
Sorrow fills my shutter.  
I have become divisive about
what is captured with the lens.
I’ve waited for you –   
you laid upon the shore
seaweed, shells, enshrouding you,
wiping away the saltiness.
Capturing an essence before you slip
away – when I release you from the net.

Posted by flaubert at 12:49 AM

40 comments:

  1. AnonymousJanuary 28, 2011 at 1:09 AM

    Pamela, I loved the fishing imagery, metaphor for the photographer. Lovely picture, too.

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  2. ElizabethJanuary 28, 2011 at 6:50 AM

    Love the poem, the wistfullness, the yearning, and fishing analogy. We are always fishing, with our eyes, thoughts, and our hearts.

    Elizabeth

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  3. FelicitasJanuary 28, 2011 at 9:18 AM

    I love the dreamy feel of this piece; a romantic fantasy. Beautiful!

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  4. RJ ClarkenJanuary 28, 2011 at 9:52 AM

    I feel like I have just witness a mermaid - fantasy made real. I loved the line, "I have become divisive about/what is captured with the lens."

    Beautifully metaphoric!

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  5. gautami tripathyJanuary 28, 2011 at 10:40 AM

    Dreamy, mystical, magical...

    singular thoughts

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  6. Brenda ClewsJanuary 28, 2011 at 10:41 AM

    What a gorgeous lament, an ode to love as elemental as the ocean. I feel the fragile nature of all of life in this poem. How easily we slip from each other on the breaking waves.

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  7. markJanuary 28, 2011 at 11:38 AM

    the camera as net idea is intriguing to me. The sense of desperate longing is one I can identify with. Truly, well done.

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  8. noneJanuary 28, 2011 at 12:28 PM

    "Sorrow fills my shutter"~ great line.
    I love the last line as well. The poem as a whole is just perfect in its touching sadness! You really got into the character of the photographer well.

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  9. RobinJanuary 28, 2011 at 2:17 PM

    Pamela, yes, yes, she is there and not there, slipping away. Beautiful portrait image. Your poem every bit as beautiful.

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  10. christopherJanuary 28, 2011 at 2:57 PM

    I think this is the best Big Tent I have been in. Everyone seems to be doing so well with this prompt and you are no exception. Your photographer is struggling but you are not as you tell the story of this photo session. Yes, I might fall in love like that for an afternoon and hurt myself in letting it go.

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  11. Tumblewords:January 28, 2011 at 3:27 PM

    Outstanding. I absolutely love it.

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  12. AnonymousJanuary 28, 2011 at 4:56 PM

    Haunting, sad beauty. I love the way you managed the prompt, Pamela. Truly artful.

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  13. JinksyJanuary 28, 2011 at 5:51 PM

    Love has its own nets to catch us in...

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  14. flaubertJanuary 28, 2011 at 6:32 PM

    Thanks Viv, I enjoyed the prompt.

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  15. flaubertJanuary 28, 2011 at 6:34 PM

    Elizabeth, this photo spoke to me in that way.
    Isn't that what love can be like.

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  16. flaubertJanuary 28, 2011 at 6:35 PM

    Felicitas thanks for the visit:)

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  17. flaubertJanuary 28, 2011 at 6:38 PM

    RJ, mermaid yes. It evoked that for me as well.
    Divisive is such an appropriate word for what I
    was trying to say.

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  18. flaubertJanuary 28, 2011 at 6:39 PM

    Thanks Gautami:)

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  19. flaubertJanuary 28, 2011 at 6:40 PM

    Sad but true Brenda. Even if we are trying to.

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  20. flaubertJanuary 28, 2011 at 6:42 PM

    Mark, desperate longing it not a good place to be in. Once I saw this photo it was the feeling I got
    from it. Thanks.

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  21. flaubertJanuary 28, 2011 at 6:44 PM

    Thanks Jade. This was an unusual experiment trying
    to think like the photographer.

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  22. flaubertJanuary 28, 2011 at 6:46 PM

    She is beautiful, isn't she?
    I knew when I found this, it was the one
    I wanted to write to. Thanks Robin.

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  23. flaubertJanuary 28, 2011 at 6:48 PM

    Christopher I completely agree. Some wonderful poems out there today. I truly appreciate the nice comment.

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  24. flaubertJanuary 28, 2011 at 6:49 PM

    Thanks Susan. I had fun writing this one.

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  25. flaubertJanuary 28, 2011 at 6:51 PM

    Victoria the artist in me saw that photo and I had to write to it. His work is quite different.
    Some of it almost disturbing.

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  26. flaubertJanuary 28, 2011 at 6:53 PM

    How absolutely true Jinksy. Love is tricky.

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  27. Laurie KolpJanuary 28, 2011 at 6:59 PM

    Very alluring photo and poem... about the sea, like me = ). I really enjoyed reading about the mermaid entangled in the fishing net. You are so creative and talented!

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  28. AnonymousJanuary 28, 2011 at 7:04 PM

    I had mermaids swimming through my mind too as I read this! Very Dreamy!

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  29. AnonymousJanuary 28, 2011 at 7:46 PM

    Haunting and wistful!

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  30. JamesJanuary 29, 2011 at 6:59 AM

    I love the play on the words capture and release in this wonderfully vivid poem.

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  31. nanJanuary 29, 2011 at 8:52 AM

    The imagery you convey from the photographer's point of view is incredibly evocative. Well done.

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  32. flaubertJanuary 29, 2011 at 6:20 PM

    Laurie, yes, we both wrote about the sea.
    She made me think of mermaids:)

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  33. flaubertJanuary 29, 2011 at 6:21 PM

    Jeanne, most of my life is spent dreaming:)

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  34. flaubertJanuary 29, 2011 at 6:21 PM

    Cara, thanks for that.

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  35. flaubertJanuary 29, 2011 at 6:23 PM

    James, I tried to approach this with the photographer in mind.
    Thanks again for the chapbook!

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  36. flaubertJanuary 29, 2011 at 6:24 PM

    Thanks much nan:)

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  37. DebJanuary 29, 2011 at 8:43 PM

    It's a beautiful story you created. I went along with it, every step of the way!

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  38. flaubertJanuary 29, 2011 at 9:29 PM

    Glad you did Deb:)
    Thanks for the prompt.

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  39. Erin DavisJanuary 30, 2011 at 5:53 PM

    Beautiful and aching. "Sorrow fills my shutter" is also my favorite. Wonderful!

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  40. flaubertJanuary 30, 2011 at 7:47 PM

    Thanks Erin, I liked this prompt. Her photo spoke to me.

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