In the near field an idle, stylish horse raised one leg
delicately,
to avoid the napalm ravaged earth
dropped a month ago, the stench still hung
the stylish horse was going blind
he had been worried he might be
when he had gambled as a pony, back in that card game in Tau Luachapore
and lost
it had seemed to him that he would lose his style
yet, here he stood, in the near field, a stylish horse with one
leg raised
as I watched bemused
scraping burnt earth into my dinner bowl
and ruminating on this sour existence
Red Wolf Journal Spring 2014, and a fresh start
10 years ago
Killer last line, Pamela!
ReplyDeleteLove the images and stories you conjure in your poetry. That is a great last line!!
ReplyDeleteWell done, Pamela!
~Mark
i saw that line too and really like how you completed a whole other world of yr own... poem...
ReplyDeletethanks for your poem Pam...well done...NY NY hu...spent some time there in late 50s and early 60s..lots of time in the Village..I think we might be taking a trip there next year
ReplyDeleteThis drags my mind almost unwillingly into quite a few different directions. Really well done!
ReplyDeletePoetry is great as therapy .Let it all hang out Pam. Good for you.
ReplyDeletelove it... it definitely went out with a bang!
ReplyDeleteWow, great poem, Pamela! I think is definitely one of your best that I've read on here! I love the images, especially the line "scraping burnt earth into my dinner bowl." Good work!
ReplyDeleteAmazing, profound imagery, Pamela. You have a lovely way of telling a haunting tale. Very nicely done!
ReplyDeleteShari
Powerful stuff here! Scraping burnt earth into my dinner bowl...what an image!
ReplyDeleteHa, excellent... great blend of humor and philosophy. I think the card game is my favorite part. ^_^ (The dinner bowl line rocks too.)
ReplyDeletePamela, you conjure up with great details.
ReplyDeletepamela, this is so good - what you have done to Norman Dubie's line.
ReplyDeleteI thought about using this one, but you took it in a very different (and very cool) direction than I would have.
ReplyDeletePowerful juxtaposition of images, Pamela! wow!
ReplyDeleteI really dig this one, Pamela. Thanks.
ReplyDeleteI love the image of the stylish horse and the glimpses of his days as a pony.
ReplyDeleteEryl: Thanks so much!
ReplyDeleteMark: Thank you!
omb: Thanks!
Wayne: Thanks so much! Yay! the village is cooool!
Jason: Gracias!
Rall: I am letting it hang hon! Thanks.
Susan: Thanks!
Richelle: Thanks for the compliment!
Shari: You're too kind!
Robin: Thank you!
Jseph: Thanks ;)
Irene: Thanks for stopping by!
Uma: Thank you!
Francis: Did anybody use this line? I thought it was an interesting line. Thanks!
Erin: Thanks!
Jason: Cool ;)
James: Glad you loved it!