what once went before me
a sound haunts me in my dreams
a despondent resonance it makes
my mind moves reluctantly
on a journey to another place
don’t fall off the train
you may lose your legs
try to keep your balance
or leave it behind
a train makes such a forlorn hum
desolate and lingering
going nowhere and everywhere
leaving emptiness inside me
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Desolation poemified. Bravo.
ReplyDeleteBeautifully done, Pamela! I will miss RWP and the many talented writers I have met here.
ReplyDeleteViv,
ReplyDeleteThanks so much. I have to make my rounds to everyone today.
Pamela
Mariane,
ReplyDeleteThanks and I will too.
Pamela
I love the picture and the forlorn mood which you have beautifully created. It reminds me of a scene in WW2.
ReplyDeleteThanks for all your support. It was good to meet you on RWP and I'm sure we will keep in touch.
The empty tracks and the train moving away.
ReplyDeleteI feel left behind as the site moves away, but I really hope to join you on another
adventurous site. I've enjoyed reading your poetry & your encouraging comments.
Marian
No worries. The next train will be here soon. :)
ReplyDeleteI certainly relate to your poem. Goodbye, Flaubert, you are one of the poets I will especially miss. Maybe we'll be on the same train again sometime - hope so.
ReplyDeleteI like this a lot. You catch that lonely train feeling that sounds like other people going places (or as Bruce Cockburn put it 'the sound someone makes when they're getting away.')
ReplyDeleteAnd, congrats on completing the napowrimo challenge!
ReplyDeleteI think we're all feeling this way, but thanks for expressing it so nicely! Thanks for visiting my blog often...and hope to see you on other poetry sites.
ReplyDeletePamela, your voice will not haunt me in my dreams, so long as we continue to hear it, which depends - yes - on your continuing to write. Looking forward to reading more of what you do. And on a personal note, I've just started doing this word thing (writing poetry) and could not be less experienced, but your gentle encouragement has meant a lot. Best,
ReplyDeleteJDM
Hi Pamela:
ReplyDeleteThis is great! You've done a lovely job of capturing the trepidation inherent in any major move forward.
I'm glad I found you and I will happily continue to follow your writing. Thank you for sharing all your heartfelt and fun poems.
Shari
Thanks so much for all the visits and support throughout NaPoWriMo. RWP will be missed but new adventures await.
ReplyDeletehey hey Pam...not depressing for this kid...just keep on truckin...by bus or train...writing words form the heart OR space..or wherever these "things" come from...been a blast...aint saying Goodby....hello and get on the paint bus for another party....seu there...CHEERS
ReplyDeletewe rattle the track clicketty clack
ReplyDeletewith a hand pushed railcar
building slow momentum, or resting our arms
ready to leap aside
if we hear the express =)
Rall,
ReplyDeleteThanks and I am also glad I met you. You always manage to bring a smile to my face.
See you next Wednesday at POW. Let the party begin.
Cheers
Pamela
Marian,
ReplyDeleteI have enjoyed your poetry and I hope to see you too!
Pamela
Joseph,
ReplyDeleteIam counting on it. I have enjoyed my time sharing and reading with you. Love your poetry.
Pamela
James,
ReplyDeleteThanks and I had a great time. Love your writing. I hope to see you round.
Pamela
Wanda,
ReplyDeleteI have throughly enjoyed reading your poetry and sharing mine with you. Thanks for the nice compliment. Hope to see you round soon!
Pamela
Robin,
ReplyDeleteThanks and yes let's stay in touch. See you at Rall's or one of the other sites. I have signed up at writer's island. And have also joined we write poems. You should also give it a go. I have enjoyed reading your poetry.
Pamela
JDM,
ReplyDeleteYou are much too kind. I can't believe you just started writing. You are GOOD! Keep it up and I hope to see you round!
Pamela
Shari,
ReplyDeleteYou are so sweet. Thanks and I have enjoyed yours as well. Let's keep in touch.
Pamela
Francis,
ReplyDeleteYou have been a delight! I have enjoyed my time spent with you. I am sure I will see you round. BTW Love your artwork!
Pamela
Wayne my friend I am getting on the bus with all you good and talented folks. I have throughly enjoyed reading and sharing before and during napowrimo.
ReplyDeleteCheers,
Pamela
Miss lucychili,
ReplyDeleteYou have also been such a delight this past month. Hope to see you round these parts.
Cheers,
Pamela