"Life is the dancer and you are the dance."
Eckhart Tolle

Thursday, April 22, 2010

The den napowrimo #22

Tomorrow marks another day

in the opium emporium

Pepper mist hangs indistinctly in the air

Crows are sitting on the divan

I flinch, they squall

Tendrils hang about my face

Saffron flowers in my mind

I am dizzy with ecstasy

Sounds reverberate in the night

Rust forms on the walls of my heart

I am fierce

You die

38 comments:

  1. What was that old Rolling Stone's song
    'Coming Down Again' snorts and smirks :)

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  2. "Pepper mist hangs indistinctly in the air" and
    "Saffron flowers in my mind" and "Rust forms on the walls of my heart" - wonderful images.
    Your poem is part tragic and part magic.

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  3. From Therese B. -- Ingenious! You took me to an unexpected place.

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  4. This is beautiful Pamela, you've taken me into an exotic world of opium fumes and saffron thoughts.

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  5. WOW! I am fierce - You die!

    A side of you I have never read and sooo fascinates me! Excellent, dear Pamela!

    My Day 22 Poem is "Squall Blows"

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  6. artofsoul,
    Thanks so much!
    Pamela

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  7. Rall,
    Was that the title? I should know that. ;)
    Pamela

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  8. Marianne,
    Thanks! I am glad you think of that way.
    Pamela

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  9. Therese,
    Thanks I am glad you think so.
    Pamela

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  10. Julie,
    There are many facets to my personality. And thanks for the nice comment.
    Pamela

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  11. But I don't WANT TO die!

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  12. Wow, I felt like I was right there and Edgar Allan Poe was smoking opium with crows on the divan and rust forming on the walls of the heart. Love this poem and the eerie imagery it evokes!

    Well done, Pamela!

    ~Mark

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  13. Mark,
    Thanks so much the nice comment.
    Pamela

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  14. Phew, you lead an exciting life! Opium dens, and a list of amazing images!

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  15. Thanks Andy. I appreciate that.
    Pamela

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  16. Excellent! I love it. You make it look so easy.

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  17. Only Footprints,
    Thanks so much for the nice comment. I love wordles!
    Pamela

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  18. Just excellent work. Especially loved the crows sitting on the divan-- odd, but very fitting your delicious imagery.

    Really liked this.

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  19. Dan,
    Thanks for such a nice compliment.
    Pamela

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  20. Ooh, this is wonderful and otherworldly. I read it three times!

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  21. Thanks so much Robin. I wrote this when I first woke up this morning.
    Pamela

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  22. Pamela--This flows so effortlessly, and wow, what a cool image/place/feeling you created. Love it! (How do I get there? :))
    The other Robin

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  23. You've created some really great atmosphere... scary good.

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  24. Robin,
    Well I am not sure exactly how to get there, hum??;) Thanks so much for your nice comments.
    Pamela

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  25. Excellent! You made the words fit the setting really well, vivid descriptions throughout... I like.

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  26. Francis,
    Would you also like to go?? ;) Thanks for the comment.
    Pamela

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  27. Joseph,
    Thanks so much for the compliment. I love wordles, they are so much fun.
    Pamela

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  28. super poem Pam...and there is that rust again...one of my favorites....for writing or painting...and I BLEW it with my poem I could have had Dizzy blowing his rusty crooked trumpet..oh well...keep up the good wring only about 18 million and 45 seconds left in this short marathorn

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  29. Wayne,
    I really appreciate your nice comments. Are there really only that many minutes and seconds left?;)
    Pamela

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  30. Pamela, I agree with Julie, a naughty and dark side we've not seen before. I love your voice, direct and tight, nicely done.
    JDM

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  31. JDM,
    Thanks for commenting and I really appreciate the nice things you say. Sometimes I can be a little naughty and dark ;)
    Pamela

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  32. I read the crows
    as people in black.
    The ending is feisty =)

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  33. Lovely! I'm so impressed at how effortlessly the prompt words slotted in - I had to remind myself what they all were, actually!

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  34. Lunch on Tuesday,
    Thank you for that!
    Pamela

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