barricades have been set up, Tom has notified the public
Jacqueline sips Chai tea from a china tea cup
she contemplates the block of terra cotta clay
he clears the area of debris, turns off water and electricity
hands are subtle and flexible, smooth to touch
she handles the clay with expertise
respirators, safety goggles, earplugs for all the men
she sits down to the wheel
lightly pumps the peddle with her delicate foot
Red Cross in place and ready with first aid kits
centering, pulling on the clay, spinning
torquing, forming the vase with her hands
they soften supporting columns, place dynamite inside
smoothing and moving the clay
the vase is taking form-becoming a work of art
set the blasting caps, clear the area, charge-fire
Red Wolf Journal Spring 2014, and a fresh start
10 years ago
I confess I don't know who the couple is, but the pairing of something so meditative as pottery and destructive as demolition is brilliant here. Excellent work!
ReplyDeleteVery interesting contrasts here. He destroys and she builds. Creative!
ReplyDeleteclearing for creativity. Mmmmm.....
ReplyDeleteRead my day 23 poem here...
I really like the language of this poem - it is both completely natural and imaginative. Somehow I was reminded of Eleanor Rigby ... strange association.
ReplyDeleteI'm racking my brains for the individuals, too! But regardless, the juxtaposition is very appealing.
ReplyDeleteWho cares who? stand back, things are happening. Very cool.
ReplyDeleteI see you've told Joseph that you didn't use real people in your poem, which will make us all feel better! Clever career juxtaposition.
ReplyDeleteI love the way the two oposites intertwine in such a seamless way.
ReplyDeleteJoseph,
ReplyDeleteAs I have already posted they are imaginary. Thanks for the nice comment. I loved your Martha Stewart poem as well.
Pamela
Thanks Only Footprints.
ReplyDeletePamela
Yup, Julie that is what he was doing.
ReplyDeletePamela
Eleanor Rigby well. ok? Thanks though!
ReplyDeletePamela
Dan,
ReplyDeleteThey are imaginative. But let's call them ... Demi Moore and Bruce Willis. Thanks!
Pamela
Ron,
ReplyDeleteThanks for that!
Pamela
Derrick,
ReplyDeleteThey could be married, couldn't they?
Thanks.
Pamela
Andy,
ReplyDeleteYou are so kind. Thanks.
Pamela
I love the contrast in language and actions here.
ReplyDeleteFrancis,
ReplyDeleteThanks for commenting on this and I enjoyed yours as well.
Pamela
I really like what you have put together here! Nice job.
ReplyDeletegreat contrast
ReplyDeleteinteresting choices
I loved the juxtaposition of the two characters, performing two such very different tasks. Well done.
ReplyDeleteLove the juxtaposition you set up here. One extreme to the other. This really works. nice job!
ReplyDelete~Mark :-)
Erin,
ReplyDeleteThanks for commenting.
Pamela
Thanks Janet!
ReplyDeletePamela
Cara,
ReplyDeleteThanks for the nice comment.
Pamela
Mark,
ReplyDeleteThanks but I failed to do it in a speaker's voice. UGH!!!
Pamela
Pamela, the contrasts placed back to back bring the gap between the two even more. Great writing.
ReplyDeleteUma,
ReplyDeleteYou are too kind. I am a little disappointed with my effort on this prompt. :(
Pamela
Awesome pairing, Pamela! Excellent weave work.
ReplyDeleteShari
Very nicely done, Pamela. It almost works as a modified cleave poem. The contrasting lines and images work perfectly. I really enjoyed this.
ReplyDeleteShari,
ReplyDeleteThanks so much! You are too kind.
Pamela
Robin,
ReplyDeleteI hadn't thought about that, but could be.
Thanks.
Pamela
hmmmmmmmmmmmm oh I know that couple....back in ...hmmmmm well I do know them...well done Pam.
ReplyDeleteWayne,
ReplyDeleteDo ya now? They could be the unlikely couple, no? Thanks.
Pamela
OK it's Tom Cruise and Jacqueleine Kennedy.
ReplyDeleteAn unlikely couple both cerebrally challenged.
From Therese B -- This is intriguing, a bit disturbing. Is it art? Is it violence? Is it cooperation? Is it terrorism? This poem is loaded, Pamela. Keep it, keep working on it.
ReplyDeleteTherese,
ReplyDeleteThank you. I think I will.
Pamela