Jars and filled up stuff crappy thoughts of life
You remind me unpleasantly of coldcream on the kitchen counter
Of where I’m headed to it should be in the bathroom cabinet
Cranberries canned mascara smudged under my eyes
Pickles on the fire my hair’s a friggin’ mess
Always love roasted pickles bathroom towels on the bedroom floor
They remind of our fantasy days wet and smelling musty
Dancing in platform shoes can’t you ever pick your stuff up off the floor
In the bar where we met you are getting on my nerves
It was early April we need to end this love affair
When you wore a lacy nightie I’d like to have someone nice and tidy
Too bad it was filthy who will call me sweetie pie
I should have done the wash more and tell me how wonderful I am
Covered in sweat and blood is that too much to ask
It’s the blood that stained our lives you can be such a selfish twit
The sweat was indifferent me I am perfect
Sometimes I wake up crying so loving and kind not a mess at all
Reflecting upon your meanness I am certainly better than you
Then I say “what the fuck, it didn’t matter anyway”
Red Wolf Journal Spring 2014, and a fresh start
10 years ago
I like how this poem moves, and the diction is wonderfully reflective. Good job!
ReplyDeleteOOOOOh someone's not a happy little vegemite
ReplyDelete( old fashioned oz expression)
I liked this poem. It is a good example of
being frustrated with a situation and the thoughts that goes through one's mind!
Pamela, I found synergy in your lines!-Irene
ReplyDeleteA house cleaved cannot stand? This had the feel of a whirlwind.
ReplyDeleteUmm...really like the gritty feeling of this! It's real, and it's effective.
ReplyDeleteThere's a deep and thoughtful psychology here, the more evident feelings toward the top, then outed by the deeper and more direct ones just underneath. I like the honesty of the narrator (never assuming it's you) unless?
ReplyDeleteBeautiful honesty!
JDM
Lori,
ReplyDeleteThanks for the compliment and commenting.
Pamela
Rall,
ReplyDeleteI am glad you liked it and it has absolutely nothing to do with my real life. I swear!;)
Vegemite, I had to look that one up. Is it good???
Pamela
GREAT poem! It's like the reader is inside your mind throughout this poem. You did a great job of pulling the reader in, because that's how I felt. You definitely pulled off the connection of bringing poems into one.
ReplyDeleteIrene,
ReplyDeleteThanks ;)
Pamela
Francis,
ReplyDeleteNo, it certainly cannot. Thanks.
Pamela
Robin,
ReplyDeleteThanks and sometimes it can be gritty!
Pamela
JDM,
ReplyDeleteCould be me know'll never know! Thanks!
Pamela
Richelle,
ReplyDeleteThanks for your comments. I am glad I was able to do that. Cool!
Pamela
Oh this is so good, Pamela. so delighted to read this three times over.
ReplyDeleteUma,
ReplyDeleteThamks! And so nice of you to day!
Pamela
I have had that inner monologue, more than once! Great stuff, Pamela.
ReplyDeleteAustralians eat vegemite on toast. Brits eat marmite.Ours is better.That saying comes from an old ad
ReplyDeleteWe're happy little vegemites
as bright as bright can be
we all enjoy our vegemite
for breakfast lunch and tea
because we love our vegemite
we all adore our vegemite
it puts a ROSE in every CHEEK
(Yes ....I know)
Very nice! I enjoyed reading this piece!
ReplyDeleteEryl,
ReplyDeleteThanks and I have it more than once myself.
Pamela
Cute Rall! But I somehow bet the Brits would disagree ;)
ReplyDeleteWeasel,
ReplyDeleteThanks for reading!
Pamela