"Life is the dancer and you are the dance."
Eckhart Tolle

Sunday, May 8, 2011

Molecular Structure A whirl of Wordling Sundays-#3

River’s mist rises in the morning
evaporation of water released
tiny molecules not seen
seaweed tugs beneath the surface
it breathes as it slides and supersedes
nature’s embroidered landscape

21 comments:

  1. This is just lovely, Pamela. I especially like "nature's embroidered landscape."

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  2. yes i just visited the join between the river and the sea here, the mist and the seaweed.

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  3. Wow. Compact!! Nicely done...doesn't seemed forced whatsoever. Great work, Pamela!

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  4. Beautiful picture! I love the river's mist in the morning, that's one of the best expressions of nature.

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  5. Super, Pamela. You've created a lovely image. Do you need the "on" after supersedes?

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  6. For lack of time, it ended up being quite short, Paula.

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  7. I hadn't though about it, Viv. I took it out, works better now.

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  8. That was fantastic! I love it!

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  9. Lovely, Pamela .. and I like the way you used "embroidered!"

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  10. A lovely poem. It was nice to see you write something short, showing your range.

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  11. Lovely alliteration of "s" sounds creates a softly musical atmosphere! And the last line is a drop of magic!

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  12. The brevity took nothing away. It said what it had to say. Admirable.

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  13. Pamela, How weird, I thought I'd commented on this yesterday. Maybe I read it and thought I'd come back? I love this piece. It is more concise than you usually write, and you rise to that very well. I especially like the two final lines. Beautiful.
    ~Brenda

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  14. Love the image you have created, one of my favorites. And that last line is perfect. Thanks for visiting the collab,

    Elizabeth

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  15. Pamela, concise and lovely. I like "tiny molecules not seen" and how it's about the evaporation of water before and/or about the seaweed below the surface after.

    Richard

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  16. Thanks to everyone else for the nice comments.

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  17. Now I like this. Very tight use of the words. A talent I don't have. Very nice. I posted ne late.

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