Eminent…
Façades built by you.
Nothing equal to what you,
say or do.
To be perfect like that in
all aspects, trying to fit
boulders through the eye
of a newt.
Never happens …
Attempting to catch
sand that flows in an hourglass.
With filters in fingers.
Pouring through small openings.
Beyond, above comparisons
you fascinate me,
Watching you twirl the world round
a room in perfect
unison never missing a step.
Peerless, my heart flows freely,
to the melodic tunes.
Red Wolf Journal Spring 2014, and a fresh start
10 years ago
Bravo, Pamela: it never occurred to me to look at this as an opportunity for romantic poetry. I like it.
ReplyDeleteThanks Viv, I am trying to get away from some of the darkness I write. I am struggling with PAD prompt today. Once finished I will visit writer's
ReplyDeleteisland. Have a nice weekend.
Pamela
Interesting take on the prompt and a nice write. Loved this for its sheer audacity:
ReplyDelete...trying to fit
boulders through the eye
of a newt.
Ruth,
ReplyDeleteIntrepidity most definitely. Thanks so much.
Pamela
That was an original take. Enjoyed it.
ReplyDeleteThanks Anthony.
ReplyDeleteOriginal is good.
Pamela
Interesting, original... not an angle that I even remotely imagined... nice piece! I love when the creative mind takes us all in different directions.
ReplyDeletereflections,
ReplyDeleteThanks and my mind does seem to go in all different directions, especially lately.
Pamela
i could feel the flutter in heart and stomach.
ReplyDeletenicely crafted
thanks monkeywrench.
ReplyDeletePamela
This was a bit different from you, Pamela, and it had a nice flow to it, with great observations.
ReplyDeleteJust a beautiful take on the prompt, Pamela. And some very effective phrasings, such as:
ReplyDelete"Watching you twirl the world round
a room in perfect
unison never missing a step."
I passed on the prompt this week. Nothing came to mind, and I accepted that!
Wonderful words and thoughts, Pamela!
ReplyDeleteStan,
ReplyDeleteMy word is that really you? So, nice to see you back in blogland. Thanks for the visit.
Pamela
Mary,
ReplyDeleteThanks and I looked for a poem by you to this prompt and saw that you hadn't written one.
Sometimes the words don't come.
Pamela
Diane,
ReplyDeleteThanks for that.
Pamela
Perfection can be uplifting; intimidating too, at times.
ReplyDeleteCheers :)