"Life is the dancer and you are the dance."
Eckhart Tolle

Monday, June 21, 2010

father monday poetry train #85

direct result of breathing

circumstances of death

years of breathing

took his life

father's story

a sympathetic figure

emotional furious spinning

father's death.

so disturbing

he suffered

6 comments:

  1. I'm really intrigued by the compression here - heading toward that precise as geometry ideal. how would you feel about honing it even more?

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  2. Richard
    Thanks and any advice you give me would be greatly appreciated!
    Pamela

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  3. Such power in a compressed piece! Nicely written!

    -Weasel

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  4. Weasel
    Thanks for commenting!
    Pamela

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  5. If only we could all lay down and die whilst sleeping peaceful...

    Well-chosen woven words, Pamela.

    - Dina

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  6. Thanks Dina and that would be the way to go. But it doesnt always happen that way.

    Pamela

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