"Life is the dancer and you are the dance."
— Eckhart Tolle

Sunday, May 8, 2011

Molecular Structure A whirl of Wordling Sundays-#3

River’s mist rises in the morning
evaporation of water released
tiny molecules not seen
seaweed tugs beneath the surface
it breathes as it slides and supersedes
nature’s embroidered landscape
Posted by flaubert at 2:04 PM

21 comments:

  1. MaryMay 8, 2011 at 3:23 PM

    This is just lovely, Pamela. I especially like "nature's embroidered landscape."

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  2. lucychiliMay 8, 2011 at 10:34 PM

    yes i just visited the join between the river and the sea here, the mist and the seaweed.

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  3. AnonymousMay 8, 2011 at 11:19 PM

    Wow. Compact!! Nicely done...doesn't seemed forced whatsoever. Great work, Pamela!

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  4. Mariya KolevaMay 9, 2011 at 12:11 AM

    Beautiful picture! I love the river's mist in the morning, that's one of the best expressions of nature.

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  5. vivinfranceMay 9, 2011 at 8:04 AM

    Super, Pamela. You've created a lovely image. Do you need the "on" after supersedes?

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  6. flaubertMay 9, 2011 at 10:53 AM

    Thanks Mary:)

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  7. flaubertMay 9, 2011 at 10:54 AM

    Janet thanks:-)

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  8. flaubertMay 9, 2011 at 10:54 AM

    For lack of time, it ended up being quite short, Paula.

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  9. flaubertMay 9, 2011 at 10:55 AM

    It is Mary:)

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  10. flaubertMay 9, 2011 at 10:55 AM

    I hadn't though about it, Viv. I took it out, works better now.

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  11. annell4May 9, 2011 at 11:57 AM

    That was fantastic! I love it!

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  12. MarianneMay 9, 2011 at 9:11 PM

    Lovely, Pamela .. and I like the way you used "embroidered!"

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  13. AnonymousMay 10, 2011 at 3:37 AM

    A lovely poem. It was nice to see you write something short, showing your range.

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  14. Gemma WisemanMay 10, 2011 at 4:40 AM

    Lovely alliteration of "s" sounds creates a softly musical atmosphere! And the last line is a drop of magic!

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  15. Dave KingMay 10, 2011 at 4:44 AM

    The brevity took nothing away. It said what it had to say. Admirable.

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  16. brenda wMay 10, 2011 at 6:56 AM

    Pamela, How weird, I thought I'd commented on this yesterday. Maybe I read it and thought I'd come back? I love this piece. It is more concise than you usually write, and you rise to that very well. I especially like the two final lines. Beautiful.
    ~Brenda

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  17. ElizabethMay 10, 2011 at 4:46 PM

    Love the image you have created, one of my favorites. And that last line is perfect. Thanks for visiting the collab,

    Elizabeth

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  18. Mr. WalkerMay 11, 2011 at 1:11 AM

    Pamela, concise and lovely. I like "tiny molecules not seen" and how it's about the evaporation of water before and/or about the seaweed below the surface after.

    Richard

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  19. flaubertMay 11, 2011 at 1:15 PM

    Thanks to everyone else for the nice comments.

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  20. Henry ClemmonsMay 13, 2011 at 10:19 PM

    Now I like this. Very tight use of the words. A talent I don't have. Very nice. I posted ne late.

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  21. Madeleine Begun KaneMay 18, 2011 at 3:42 PM

    Lovely imagery.

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