"Life is the dancer and you are the dance."
— Eckhart Tolle

Wednesday, August 11, 2010

My fear we write poems #14 a list poem

I’m not afraid of anything

I’d never;

              Jump off a bridge or

              a cliff

you can’t put me in a box

                                     with just a cord about my waist

                                     or my ankle

Jump out of a plane

                             just a pack on my back

                             pull a cord and make my safety secure

you could wrap me round

a silly go round

I’m afraid of some things
Posted by flaubert at 9:58 AM

16 comments:

  1. Dina SpiceAugust 11, 2010 at 10:31 AM

    I like the playfulness of this one, Pamela. Seems as though you were thinking out loud. I think the layout lends to that feel wonderfully.

    - Dina

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  2. Diane TAugust 11, 2010 at 11:37 AM

    I feel the same way, especially about bungee jumping! Too dangerous for a brave person like me, LOL. Beautifully written!

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  3. brenda wAugust 11, 2010 at 12:57 PM

    Great piece, Pamela! The silly go round sums it up. I like my feet firmly planted. :)
    ~Brenda

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  4. ElizabethAugust 11, 2010 at 1:12 PM

    I have done many things, some that taught me lasting deep rooted lessons, others the lesson that I'll never try that again. I too like the playfulness in your poem, but then it is in play that we learn best. I like the structure of the piece that puts me in mind of a child playing hide and seek, or some other silly go-round.

    Elizabeth

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  5. MaryAugust 11, 2010 at 4:30 PM

    I was struk by the first line "I'm not afraid of amything" as compared to the ending "I'm afraid of some things." Nice writing, Pamela.

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  6. Ron.August 11, 2010 at 5:10 PM

    You can't even get me *on* a high bridge or cliff. Well done, P!

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  7. Paul OakleyAugust 11, 2010 at 6:16 PM

    Nice, Pamela! I like the way you start with hyperbole, qualify it, then admit it's not quite right. So real!

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  8. Carrie Van HornAugust 11, 2010 at 6:23 PM

    I am with Brenda, I like my feet planted firmly on the ground. Love your list poem! :-)

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  9. AnonymousAugust 12, 2010 at 2:55 AM

    It is possible to be brave and smart ;)
    i enjoyed this, it makes me think of how I talk: make a comment then add the stipulations :)

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  10. Sabi SunshineAugust 12, 2010 at 8:46 AM

    ALways have a courage to step up in life! I enjoyed this poem a lot!

    Have a wonderful week!

    Love
    Sunshine

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  11. gautami tripathyAugust 12, 2010 at 10:56 AM

    Great way to do it!


    tumbled thoughts in a silver tumbler

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  12. flaubertAugust 12, 2010 at 1:34 PM

    Thanks everyone for all the nice comments!
    Pamela

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  13. Wayne PitchkoAugust 13, 2010 at 6:03 PM

    nicely afraid......ed....thanks for this Pam

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  14. flaubertAugust 13, 2010 at 7:23 PM

    Thanks Wayne!
    There are some things I am afraid of!
    Pam

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  15. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis HallAugust 13, 2010 at 8:57 PM

    u r so very productive..
    love your talent!

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  16. flaubertAugust 13, 2010 at 10:42 PM

    Thanks Jingle have a nice weekend!
    Pamela

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