"Life is the dancer and you are the dance."
Eckhart Tolle

Tuesday, August 10, 2010

about a girl POW $#15 wordle

In the morn among a trickle
Rude Rose in her girdle
She didn’t want to wobble
A maiden in her heart for joy boy
Her peach glow was compact

Silk and tulle covered a table for tea
Fine china starting to crack
In the hall on logs she would burn
the bud of a dead flower

She had a frisson quake run through her
With fingers in white lap
And a sparrow feather for a promise
On the tip of her lip nothing but twaddle

20 comments:

  1. Interesting images, Pamela. I picture a girl who lost her maidenhead, or is about to. Am I close?
    ~Brenda

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  2. I get the same picture, (Brenda's first suggestion)...
    Compact use of the words.

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  3. she seems to be only virgin in her heart.

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  4. On the tip of her lip nothing but twaddle

    Sounds like a bad case of young love overcome with anticipation! Clever of you to get all the words in such a concise format.

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  5. Something suggests she's not quite so virginal as might appear! I like "sparrow feather for a promise". The words have certainly lent a sensual aspect to many of our poems!

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  6. Clever compact poem. I am going to use 'joy boy'..Ha.
    It is easy to ramble on and on with wordles. The skill in craft and imagination is keeping it short as you have.I tend to agree with Barbara on this one.

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  7. I see her more as a middle-aged wannabe sex symbol (because she need a girdle to stop her wobbling). The joy boy is a great introduction.

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  8. Brenda thanks and no but Viv got it right!
    Pamela

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  9. Barb she is only in her heart!
    Pamela

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  10. Jinksy thanks but not young love!
    Pamela

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  11. Derrick thanks and yes not so virginal!
    Pamela

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  12. Rall thanks for the nice compliment!
    Pam

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  13. Viv you are absolutely correct!
    The clue is her wobbling that would not be a young girl.
    Pamela

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  14. Sorry I missed the guessing game. That's a great last stanza.

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  15. nicely wordled Pam...no ???...I knew Rude Rose...didnt drink tea though.....and she wasnt really rude... thanks for your words again

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  16. Wayne thanks and it seems we have lost Rall
    temporarily!
    Pam

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  17. http://itistimetothinkformyself.blogspot.com/2010/08/55-flash-friday-55-is-written-by.html
    an award for you,
    Happy Weekend,
    Cheers!
    :)

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  18. Thanks Jingle and have a nice weekend too!
    cheers
    Pamela

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