"Life is the dancer and you are the dance."
— Eckhart Tolle

Tuesday, August 10, 2010

about a girl POW $#15 wordle

In the morn among a trickle
Rude Rose in her girdle
She didn’t want to wobble
A maiden in her heart for joy boy
Her peach glow was compact

Silk and tulle covered a table for tea
Fine china starting to crack
In the hall on logs she would burn
the bud of a dead flower

She had a frisson quake run through her
With fingers in white lap
And a sparrow feather for a promise
On the tip of her lip nothing but twaddle
Posted by flaubert at 8:40 PM

19 comments:

  1. brenda wAugust 10, 2010 at 9:18 PM

    Interesting images, Pamela. I picture a girl who lost her maidenhead, or is about to. Am I close?
    ~Brenda

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  2. Stan SkiAugust 10, 2010 at 10:00 PM

    I get the same picture, (Brenda's first suggestion)...
    Compact use of the words.

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  3. UnknownAugust 10, 2010 at 10:35 PM

    she seems to be only virgin in her heart.

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  4. JinksyAugust 11, 2010 at 4:49 AM

    On the tip of her lip nothing but twaddle

    Sounds like a bad case of young love overcome with anticipation! Clever of you to get all the words in such a concise format.

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  5. UnknownAugust 11, 2010 at 5:23 AM

    Something suggests she's not quite so virginal as might appear! I like "sparrow feather for a promise". The words have certainly lent a sensual aspect to many of our poems!

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  6. rallentandaAugust 11, 2010 at 6:06 AM

    Clever compact poem. I am going to use 'joy boy'..Ha.
    It is easy to ramble on and on with wordles. The skill in craft and imagination is keeping it short as you have.I tend to agree with Barbara on this one.

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  7. vivienne blakeAugust 11, 2010 at 8:09 AM

    I see her more as a middle-aged wannabe sex symbol (because she need a girdle to stop her wobbling). The joy boy is a great introduction.

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  8. flaubertAugust 11, 2010 at 9:37 AM

    Brenda thanks and no but Viv got it right!
    Pamela

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  9. flaubertAugust 11, 2010 at 9:37 AM

    Thanks Stan!
    Pamela

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  10. flaubertAugust 11, 2010 at 9:38 AM

    Barb she is only in her heart!
    Pamela

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  11. flaubertAugust 11, 2010 at 9:39 AM

    Jinksy thanks but not young love!
    Pamela

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  12. flaubertAugust 11, 2010 at 9:40 AM

    Derrick thanks and yes not so virginal!
    Pamela

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  13. flaubertAugust 11, 2010 at 9:42 AM

    Rall thanks for the nice compliment!
    Pam

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  14. Francis ScudellariAugust 12, 2010 at 1:55 AM

    Sorry I missed the guessing game. That's a great last stanza.

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  15. flaubertAugust 12, 2010 at 7:53 PM

    Thanks a lot Francis!
    Pamela

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  16. Wayne PitchkoAugust 12, 2010 at 10:57 PM

    nicely wordled Pam...no ???...I knew Rude Rose...didnt drink tea though.....and she wasnt really rude... thanks for your words again

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  17. flaubertAugust 12, 2010 at 11:05 PM

    Wayne thanks and it seems we have lost Rall
    temporarily!
    Pam

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  18. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis HallAugust 13, 2010 at 8:57 PM

    http://itistimetothinkformyself.blogspot.com/2010/08/55-flash-friday-55-is-written-by.html
    an award for you,
    Happy Weekend,
    Cheers!
    :)

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  19. flaubertAugust 13, 2010 at 11:08 PM

    Thanks Jingle and have a nice weekend too!
    cheers
    Pamela

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