I
surge
during streams of
existence. I must sustain
this fluid touch, clear ecstasy and
balance to hydrate. Our senses come to
relief with a single drop released from sources,
past idiosyncrasies, lost forever without this contact.
essential and vital moves through the tributary in the air
depending on flows of oxygen. Swimming in the orbit of
space. Seeping in deep creases of saturated drips on
mountainous rocks lined with coolness over its
face. Its flow remains liquid on the
path of necessity for
life-water
How beautifully constructed - in more ways than one...
ReplyDeleteExcellent poem, and I loved the shape. There is so much to be said for a single drop of water!
ReplyDeleteYour poem flows freely and effortlessly, like the water it describes. Wonderfully written!
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Wonderfully written! The shape really brings out the poem! Awesome post!
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I love so many things about this poem: the way it looks on the page is fantastic, a ton of work just accomplishing THAT. And the language, the flow, the intelligence of it...........wow. Well done.
ReplyDeleteThanks nino and thanks for an excellent prompt!
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Mary thanks and yes there is so much to be said!
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Thanks so much Lynette and thanks for visiting.
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Weasel thanks so much and I hope school is going well.
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Sherry thank you and I appreciate your kind words.
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Pamela, I love what you did with this poem. I especially enjoyed "swimming in the orbit of space" and the shape of the poem. Very clever.
ReplyDeleteThanks Diane and I had fun with this!
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This is very well done :) I've written a shaped piece before, a simple delta, and that was hard enough....This is just wonderful, and the poetry is class A too.
ReplyDeleteReally nice and I love the shape!
ReplyDeleteNice shape! and wonderfully written poem, I am now trying to play around with the shapes and connecting it to my images =P Thank for the fun time Pamela^^~
ReplyDeletePamela, I love what you did with your poem for the prompt. Brilliant work! :-)
ReplyDeleteAnd I love your new layout! :-)
Tracysays thanks for visiting and commenting!
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Pan thanks for that!
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Riika this was a lot of fun for me and thanks!
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Carrie thanks and you are too kind!
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Jingle thanks and I will try to do that!
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It flows like water, really great!!! I love the variety and fluidity of it!
ReplyDeleteThanks Ellie!
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Pamela
Great flow and visual presentation...enjoyed reading you. (^_^)
ReplyDeleteReally good work on this, Pamela, lots of detail and wonderfully soft imagery, as well as a wealth of wisdom, all presented in one drop.
ReplyDeleteHat's off to you,
Elizabeth
Dasun thanks for the comment and visiting!
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Elizabeth
ReplyDeleteThanks for the nice compliment!
Pamela