"Life is the dancer and you are the dance."
Eckhart Tolle

Friday, August 20, 2010

experiences poets united #11 pain

Pain comes in waves

That dance round poles

of opposite forces

It may rise and fall

swing on the sideways

tilt

Feel pain form inside

Released through pores sealed tight

crusted and deadened by respirations

stiff

18 comments:

  1. flaubert,

    Your words project the ultimate pain........
    A very good 'feel' to express this Thursday Prompt, associated with Pain.

    Eileen

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  2. Very nice; great response to the prompt.

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  3. Pamela, you have really captured the feeling of pain here.

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  4. Oh that tilt kills ya! Why do they make shoes an average of 2.5 inches across when the average woman's foot is 4 inches wide. I think men are the source, lol, although they'd never wear shoes that narrow! The pain is projected in your voice, Pamela! Excellent!

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  5. I love the tilt, and pain that dance round poles of opposite forces. It winds its way through... Well done!
    ~Brenda

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  6. Flaubert, love the imagery in this it really projects the painful feelings. Wonderful writing! :-)

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  7. Eileen pain comes in so many different forms.
    Thanks.
    Pamela

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  8. Mary always a pleasure to see you, thanks!
    Pamela

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  9. Diane thanks and I cannot even imagine a man wearing the painful shoes we wear, they do not have the stamina ;)
    Pamela

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  10. Thanks my friend Brenda!
    Pamela

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  11. Wonderful imagery in this piece! =)

    -Weasel

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  12. I can feel the pain within >.< So much images flowing into me at once :X

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