"Life is the dancer and you are the dance."
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Tuesday, August 17, 2010

the colors that mix we write poems #15

I see a tinge of ochre
as I look through this maze
of memories cast aside

Chartreuse becomes unforgiving
as we mount them on a pedestal
I look for vividness in a foggy
past and hope for something more

I see a trace of melancholy
and wonder where it has gone
Posted by flaubert at 9:26 PM

24 comments:

  1. brenda wAugust 17, 2010 at 10:23 PM

    Pamela,
    The influence of the last week rings heavy in this poem. Beautiful piece. I especially like "I look for vividness in a foggy past and hope for something more" (me too)
    ~Brenda

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  2. MaryAugust 18, 2010 at 6:59 AM

    I also like the line: "I look for vividness in a foggy past." As I am writing here, I am thinking that perhaps this is one things that poems can accomplish: keep our memories VIVID. Nicely crafted.

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  3. flaubertAugust 18, 2010 at 7:05 AM

    Brenda thanks and I have not written anything for the past few days. But last night I decided to write to the prompt.
    Pamela

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  4. flaubertAugust 18, 2010 at 7:06 AM

    Thanks Mary I think so.
    Pamela

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  5. UnknownAugust 18, 2010 at 7:33 AM

    Definitely tinged with sadness, Pamela. But the vividness was there once.

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  6. gautami tripathyAugust 18, 2010 at 10:07 AM

    Beautiful, vivid...sad but I see hope too...

    in a roomful of plates

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  7. Paul OakleyAugust 18, 2010 at 11:05 AM

    Nicely done, Pamela! I love the unforgiving nature of these hoarded memories. I had a hard time approaching the picture because of the unforgiving melancholy in it. You've captured it nicely!

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  8. Diane TAugust 18, 2010 at 12:05 PM

    I see that trace of melancholy too, Pamela. Your poem was very touching... well analyzed... I loved it!

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  9. MarianvAugust 18, 2010 at 2:38 PM

    I also liked the "trace of melancholy" - things that hide just beneath the surface...

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  10. flaubertAugust 18, 2010 at 8:22 PM

    Derrick it certainly was.
    Thanks
    Pamela

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  11. flaubertAugust 18, 2010 at 8:23 PM

    Thanks Gautami!
    Pamela

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  12. flaubertAugust 18, 2010 at 8:25 PM

    Thank you Paul
    It was a difficult picture for me as well.
    Pamela

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  13. flaubertAugust 18, 2010 at 8:26 PM

    Thanks Diane.
    Pamela

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  14. flaubertAugust 18, 2010 at 8:26 PM

    Thanks Marian!
    Pamela

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  15. ireneAugust 19, 2010 at 6:02 AM

    Now that you mentioned it, yes it does have an undertone of melancholy..Hmmm

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  16. flaubertAugust 19, 2010 at 12:33 PM

    Thank Irene!
    Pamela

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  17. AnonymousAugust 19, 2010 at 1:24 PM

    I love the dichotomy in this poem..some memories so vivid and colourful..other a foggy blur. How do we choose which is which?

    Beautiful writing...

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  18. flaubertAugust 19, 2010 at 2:04 PM

    imaginative traveler
    Thanks and I am not sure exactly.
    Pamela

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  19. Wayne PitchkoAugust 19, 2010 at 3:38 PM

    ochre in first line got me going....then the foggy past.....ummmm nuttin is foggy in the past....kinda muddy....anyways thanks again Pam...Mexico cam up at poker last nite 2 of the guys go down there at least once a year...sailing and scuba...and whatever else....take care

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  20. flaubertAugust 19, 2010 at 3:52 PM

    Wayne thanks for the nice comment.
    What part of Mexico do they go to?
    Cheers
    Pam

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  21. AnonymousAugust 20, 2010 at 7:58 AM

    Isn't it wonderful where this prompt has taken everyone? I saw cheery schmaltz, others just memories and you saw sadness and wrote it with subtlety.

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  22. flaubertAugust 20, 2010 at 9:46 AM

    Thanks Viv and I did see sadness in this picture.
    Pamela

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  23. LindaAugust 20, 2010 at 5:28 PM

    I see a tinge of ochre
    as I look through this maze
    of memories cast aside

    Beautiful beginning. This poem speaks to me on many levels,

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  24. flaubertAugust 20, 2010 at 7:56 PM

    Thanks Linda.
    Pamela

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