"Life is the dancer and you are the dance."
Eckhart Tolle

Wednesday, July 7, 2010

reverse to go foward we write poems #9 line by line

Sadness melancholy

Peace and quiet - sun is setting

So much to be seen in this photo

the angel’s eyes are following me everywhere I go

Light like crystals in my eyes

Watching you cry as I walked upon an aisle

Wondering how much pain I caused

You didn’t understand

All looked like big fancy flowers ready to wilt

In a vase too fragile to contain them

Rain - I love you

Sand - sun and saltwater sting my skin

Completely lost, frustrated and brilliant but unseen

Sitting in a vase just like flowers for everyone to touch

Despise you and annoy you

Sitting on a shore by myself with no one around me

A beautiful beach in this universe

Could be the moon

14 comments:

  1. oh, so poignant. I love this, Pamela. I love your words. So rich... oh, my.

    Read My WWP #9 Poem here.

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  2. Thanks Julie and I am glad to see you here!
    Pamela

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  3. I love the angel's eyes following you...and the statement "Rain - I love you" it washes everything clean. Well done. ~Brenda

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  4. Brenda thanks for the nice comment
    In fact we have a beautiful photo of an angel gravestone and at times it seems as if the eyes are following you!
    Pamela

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  5. What a strong poem in response to this prompt, Pamela.

    I love: "A beautiful beach in this universe could be the moon."

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  6. I sense melancholy here, Pamela.

    I love the angel eyes following wherevery you go.

    I do like what you did with this prompt!

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  7. Diane thanks for the nice comment!
    Pamela

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  8. Mary
    Thanks and lately I having been feeling blue
    I think I need a vacation on a beach by myself
    well maybe with my dogs ;)
    Pamela

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  9. Pamela, I empathize with your thought about vacationing with your dogs. The hardest thing about vacationing is being without them!

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  10. You captured well the sense of loss and how alien the best of places can become without the company we loved however much taken for granted.

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  11. Thanks Stan a very good assessment.
    Pamela

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  12. Melancholy, yes, but sometimes we feel so much better afterwards!

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