"Life is the dancer and you are the dance."
— Eckhart Tolle

Thursday, July 15, 2010

'wearing a ring' poets united #6 diamonds

placing the ice casing

round her turgid finger

longing to procrastinate

warlord union

haze formed before her eyes

trembling

worrying

feeling

unsatisfactory forecast

take a sip of wine in the Kremlin

as your atonement is percolated

filtered through crummy insights
Posted by flaubert at 5:30 PM

18 comments:

  1. MoryJuly 15, 2010 at 6:26 PM

    ahhah, is this really how women feel in presence of a diamond. i guess this will always remain a mastery for guys. You superbly describe how it feels to wear a diamond.

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  2. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis HallJuly 15, 2010 at 7:15 PM

    sweet and fun.
    love your words.

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  3. Robert LloydJuly 15, 2010 at 8:13 PM

    Oh this scares me but its beautiful. I myself mary in 6 months and I hope she doesn't tremble with worry too bad when looking at my itty bitty diamond lol. Thank you for sharing.

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  4. flaubertJuly 16, 2010 at 8:44 AM

    Mory thanks!
    I am not sure if this is how women feel but could be!
    Pamela

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  5. flaubertJuly 16, 2010 at 8:45 AM

    Jingle thanks and thanks for the invite!
    Pamela

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  6. flaubertJuly 16, 2010 at 8:48 AM

    Dont be scared Robert. Thanks!
    I am sure she loves you no matter the size of the rock!
    Pamela

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  7. Gordon MasonJuly 16, 2010 at 1:03 PM

    I enjoyed the scarcity of words to give maximum effect and the line 'take a sip of wine in the Kremlin'; may I humbly suggest that the word 'crummy' is a lesser poetic word than the others and seems out of place.

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  8. flaubertJuly 16, 2010 at 1:16 PM

    Thanks for letting me know that ;) I just could not find something to fit better for me at the time!Thanks for commenting!
    Pamela

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  9. Diane TJuly 16, 2010 at 6:59 PM

    IHHmmmm. I'm wearing a nail polish color called "Show Me
    The Ring". Guess I'll have to do that! Your poem made me think of Dr. Zhivago! Although I barely remember it! In any case, well written!

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  10. flaubertJuly 16, 2010 at 7:04 PM

    Diane thanks for saying so!
    Dr. Zhivago huh!
    Pamela

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  11. MaryJuly 16, 2010 at 8:28 PM

    Pamela, this 'diamond' poem seems a bit ominous with the unsatisfactory forecast. Not sure she should accept.

    http://inthecornerofmyeye.blogspot.com/2010/07/diamond-ring.html

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  12. WeaselJuly 16, 2010 at 9:15 PM

    Beautifully written! A wonderful take on the prompt!

    -Weasel

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  13. flaubertJuly 16, 2010 at 10:49 PM

    Mary I pretty sure she won't ;)
    Pamela

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  14. flaubertJuly 16, 2010 at 10:51 PM

    Weasel thanks you are so kind!
    Pamela

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  15. Linda GoinJuly 18, 2010 at 10:29 PM

    Pamela -- Crummy? LOL -- you run out of words? You? Love the word, "turgid."

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  16. brenda wJuly 19, 2010 at 8:03 AM

    Pamela (and Linda), I was thinking that I liked "crummy insight." It made it so mundane, although turgid got me, too. Well done, Pamela!

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  17. flaubertJuly 22, 2010 at 4:14 PM

    linda perhaps!
    Thanks
    Pamela

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  18. flaubertJuly 22, 2010 at 4:14 PM

    brenda I am not sure what happened here!
    thanks!
    Pamela

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