"Life is the dancer and you are the dance."
Eckhart Tolle

Tuesday, August 17, 2010

the colors that mix we write poems #15

I see a tinge of ochre
as I look through this maze
of memories cast aside

Chartreuse becomes unforgiving
as we mount them on a pedestal
I look for vividness in a foggy
past and hope for something more

I see a trace of melancholy
and wonder where it has gone

24 comments:

  1. Pamela,
    The influence of the last week rings heavy in this poem. Beautiful piece. I especially like "I look for vividness in a foggy past and hope for something more" (me too)
    ~Brenda

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  2. I also like the line: "I look for vividness in a foggy past." As I am writing here, I am thinking that perhaps this is one things that poems can accomplish: keep our memories VIVID. Nicely crafted.

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  3. Brenda thanks and I have not written anything for the past few days. But last night I decided to write to the prompt.
    Pamela

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  4. Definitely tinged with sadness, Pamela. But the vividness was there once.

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  5. Nicely done, Pamela! I love the unforgiving nature of these hoarded memories. I had a hard time approaching the picture because of the unforgiving melancholy in it. You've captured it nicely!

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  6. I see that trace of melancholy too, Pamela. Your poem was very touching... well analyzed... I loved it!

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  7. I also liked the "trace of melancholy" - things that hide just beneath the surface...

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  8. Derrick it certainly was.
    Thanks
    Pamela

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  9. Thank you Paul
    It was a difficult picture for me as well.
    Pamela

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  10. Now that you mentioned it, yes it does have an undertone of melancholy..Hmmm

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  11. I love the dichotomy in this poem..some memories so vivid and colourful..other a foggy blur. How do we choose which is which?

    Beautiful writing...

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  12. imaginative traveler
    Thanks and I am not sure exactly.
    Pamela

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  13. ochre in first line got me going....then the foggy past.....ummmm nuttin is foggy in the past....kinda muddy....anyways thanks again Pam...Mexico cam up at poker last nite 2 of the guys go down there at least once a year...sailing and scuba...and whatever else....take care

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  14. Wayne thanks for the nice comment.
    What part of Mexico do they go to?
    Cheers
    Pam

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  15. Isn't it wonderful where this prompt has taken everyone? I saw cheery schmaltz, others just memories and you saw sadness and wrote it with subtlety.

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  16. Thanks Viv and I did see sadness in this picture.
    Pamela

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  17. I see a tinge of ochre
    as I look through this maze
    of memories cast aside

    Beautiful beginning. This poem speaks to me on many levels,

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