"Life is the dancer and you are the dance."
Eckhart Tolle

Friday, April 30, 2010

saying goodbye ... napowrimo #30

a train passes by …

what once went before me

a sound haunts me in my dreams

a despondent resonance it makes

my mind moves reluctantly

on a journey to another place

don’t fall off the train

you may lose your legs

try to keep your balance

or leave it behind

a train makes such a forlorn hum

desolate and lingering

going nowhere and everywhere

leaving emptiness inside me

27 comments:

  1. Beautifully done, Pamela! I will miss RWP and the many talented writers I have met here.

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  2. Viv,
    Thanks so much. I have to make my rounds to everyone today.
    Pamela

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  3. Mariane,
    Thanks and I will too.
    Pamela

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  4. I love the picture and the forlorn mood which you have beautifully created. It reminds me of a scene in WW2.
    Thanks for all your support. It was good to meet you on RWP and I'm sure we will keep in touch.

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  5. The empty tracks and the train moving away.
    I feel left behind as the site moves away, but I really hope to join you on another
    adventurous site. I've enjoyed reading your poetry & your encouraging comments.
    Marian

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  6. No worries. The next train will be here soon. :)

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  7. I certainly relate to your poem. Goodbye, Flaubert, you are one of the poets I will especially miss. Maybe we'll be on the same train again sometime - hope so.

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  8. I like this a lot. You catch that lonely train feeling that sounds like other people going places (or as Bruce Cockburn put it 'the sound someone makes when they're getting away.')

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  9. And, congrats on completing the napowrimo challenge!

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  10. I think we're all feeling this way, but thanks for expressing it so nicely! Thanks for visiting my blog often...and hope to see you on other poetry sites.

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  11. Pamela, your voice will not haunt me in my dreams, so long as we continue to hear it, which depends - yes - on your continuing to write. Looking forward to reading more of what you do. And on a personal note, I've just started doing this word thing (writing poetry) and could not be less experienced, but your gentle encouragement has meant a lot. Best,
    JDM

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  12. Hi Pamela:

    This is great! You've done a lovely job of capturing the trepidation inherent in any major move forward.

    I'm glad I found you and I will happily continue to follow your writing. Thank you for sharing all your heartfelt and fun poems.

    Shari

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  13. Thanks so much for all the visits and support throughout NaPoWriMo. RWP will be missed but new adventures await.

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  14. hey hey Pam...not depressing for this kid...just keep on truckin...by bus or train...writing words form the heart OR space..or wherever these "things" come from...been a blast...aint saying Goodby....hello and get on the paint bus for another party....seu there...CHEERS

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  15. we rattle the track clicketty clack
    with a hand pushed railcar
    building slow momentum, or resting our arms
    ready to leap aside
    if we hear the express =)

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  16. Rall,
    Thanks and I am also glad I met you. You always manage to bring a smile to my face.
    See you next Wednesday at POW. Let the party begin.
    Cheers
    Pamela

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  17. Marian,
    I have enjoyed your poetry and I hope to see you too!
    Pamela

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  18. Joseph,
    Iam counting on it. I have enjoyed my time sharing and reading with you. Love your poetry.
    Pamela

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  19. James,
    Thanks and I had a great time. Love your writing. I hope to see you round.
    Pamela

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  20. Wanda,
    I have throughly enjoyed reading your poetry and sharing mine with you. Thanks for the nice compliment. Hope to see you round soon!
    Pamela

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  21. Robin,
    Thanks and yes let's stay in touch. See you at Rall's or one of the other sites. I have signed up at writer's island. And have also joined we write poems. You should also give it a go. I have enjoyed reading your poetry.
    Pamela

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  22. JDM,
    You are much too kind. I can't believe you just started writing. You are GOOD! Keep it up and I hope to see you round!
    Pamela

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  23. Shari,
    You are so sweet. Thanks and I have enjoyed yours as well. Let's keep in touch.
    Pamela

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  24. Francis,
    You have been a delight! I have enjoyed my time spent with you. I am sure I will see you round. BTW Love your artwork!
    Pamela

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  25. Wayne my friend I am getting on the bus with all you good and talented folks. I have throughly enjoyed reading and sharing before and during napowrimo.
    Cheers,
    Pamela

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  26. Miss lucychili,
    You have also been such a delight this past month. Hope to see you round these parts.
    Cheers,
    Pamela

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