"Life is the dancer and you are the dance."
— Eckhart Tolle

Thursday, June 17, 2010

imagine this big tent poetry #7 wordle


Don’t resent me I praise you

left hungry in a dangerous

dark part of the city

diseased chest cavities

cough releasing filth

Don’t resent me I praise you

pieces of falling stars

from a milky sky

comfort is an alley

memory is dull

you keep saying

Don’t resent me because I praise you
Posted by flaubert at 8:47 PM

32 comments:

  1. AnonymousJune 18, 2010 at 9:17 AM

    A dark, painful and difficult topic - and great use of the wordle words.

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  2. Julie Jordan ScottJune 18, 2010 at 9:22 AM

    Wow, you took a common (I think) topic and gave it substance and form.

    Painful and lovely, all at once.

    Thank you, Pamela!

    Read my Big Red Tent Wordle Poem here.

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  3. rallentandaJune 18, 2010 at 9:30 AM

    OK, resent me because I am praising you. This is a good poem!

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  4. brenda wJune 18, 2010 at 10:04 AM

    Powerful response, Pamela. comfort is an alley.

    So much I like about this. thanks

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  5. Raven's Wing PoetryJune 18, 2010 at 11:33 AM

    Agreed with Julie...painful and beautiful at the same time.

    This, oddly enough, conjured up 19th century London for me...homeless women and children...TB-infected all around...dark alleys where the forgotten can be found Very heartbreaking.

    Or then again, this could be 21st century America.

    -Nicole

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  6. flaubertJune 18, 2010 at 12:08 PM

    Thanks BrendaC!
    I enjoyed yours also!
    Pamela

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  7. flaubertJune 18, 2010 at 12:09 PM

    Julie thanks and it is good to see you back writing!
    Pamela

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  8. flaubertJune 18, 2010 at 12:09 PM

    Thanks Rall I appreciate that ;)
    Pamela

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  9. flaubertJune 18, 2010 at 12:11 PM

    Brendaw
    Thanks for saying so!
    Seems most went dark on this one!
    Pamela

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  10. flaubertJune 18, 2010 at 12:14 PM

    Nicole interesting that you would mention 19th century London! I can see the connection. I was thinking more of 21st century America. Thanks!
    Pamela

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  11. angieJune 18, 2010 at 2:14 PM

    oh , this is a heavy one. wow!
    funny how everyone seems to be writing dark poems with this one; I think alexie's emotion carried through his words.

    nice work, Pamela!

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  12. flaubertJune 18, 2010 at 3:08 PM

    I think that might be so Angie
    Thanks!
    Pamela

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  13. WeaselJune 18, 2010 at 4:00 PM

    Great work! Thanks for sharing!

    -Weasel

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  14. flaubertJune 18, 2010 at 4:01 PM

    Thanks Weasel!
    Pamela

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  15. AnonymousJune 18, 2010 at 4:08 PM

    the line in this i keep coming back to is "you keep saying." as simple as it is, it adds another dimension to this!

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  16. flaubertJune 18, 2010 at 4:29 PM

    Carolee thanks!
    I enjoy these wordle prompts
    I certainly enjoyed yours as well!

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  17. Tumblewords:June 18, 2010 at 4:52 PM

    comfort is an alley
    A profound phrase which conjures up a plethora of images - there's a sense of past, present and future in this. Very nice.

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  18. flaubertJune 18, 2010 at 5:13 PM

    Susan
    Thanks for the nice comment!
    Pamela

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  19. AnonymousJune 18, 2010 at 5:17 PM

    Really, really striking - I loved effects of the lack of punctuation, the punchy lines, and above all the second occurrence of the repeated line - I find myself extremely impressed.

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  20. flaubertJune 18, 2010 at 5:28 PM

    wta
    Thanks for a very nice and thoughtful comment!
    Pamela

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  21. MarianneJune 18, 2010 at 8:10 PM

    This is good, Pamela! And I love how differently each one of us has interpreted the wordle words.

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  22. flaubertJune 18, 2010 at 8:24 PM

    Thanks Marianne! And we all do interpret it differently!
    Pamela

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  23. Stan SkiJune 19, 2010 at 12:57 AM

    You really did those words proud with this post!

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  24. AnonymousJune 19, 2010 at 2:34 AM

    Great use of the prompt, Pamela.

    http://thelaughinghousewife.wordpress.com

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  25. DebJune 19, 2010 at 12:02 PM

    The tone is relentless, given the repetition, which works so very well.

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  26. Cynthia ShortJune 20, 2010 at 8:30 AM

    So disturbingly sad, and beautifully written.

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  27. flaubertJune 20, 2010 at 9:33 AM

    Stans thanks for that!
    Pamela

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  28. flaubertJune 20, 2010 at 9:33 AM

    Thanks LHW
    Pamela

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  29. flaubertJune 20, 2010 at 9:34 AM

    Deb I love wordles!
    Thanks!
    Pamela

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  30. flaubertJune 20, 2010 at 9:35 AM

    Thank you Cynthia!
    Pamela

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  31. Francis ScudellariJune 20, 2010 at 11:01 PM

    This left me wanting to know more of the back-story. Well done.

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  32. flaubertJune 21, 2010 at 8:37 AM

    Thanks Francis!
    Pamela

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