And The Moon And The Stars And The World
Long walks at night
I walk under the moon and wait
I stare at the forms in the door
Are you listening to the cry of the owl,
deep in the woods
I watch the domestic fight with sentiment
Throwing china plates and crystal,
that smash with fury against stone walls
And shatter to pieces: on fine linen sheets
As silk lingerie is hung from ceiling rafters
So that we may watch the sorrow flow,
from the unfaithful
the moon the stars and the world
Charles Bukowski
http://www.poemhunter.com/poem/and-the-moon-and-the-stars-and-the-world-2/
Red Wolf Journal Spring 2014, and a fresh start
10 years ago
Pamela, your well crafted poem has impact!
ReplyDeleteThis prompt has widened my poetic horizons, making me look up the original poems!
ReplyDeleteYours is intriguing, but I'm not sure I understand it properly, not even after reading Bukowski's version
Buckishly good.
ReplyDeleteI can relate your poem to Bukowski's and I love the last three lines.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful words..well written
ReplyDeleteI like your interpretation. I don't think I get the subtleties of the linen and silk, though.
ReplyDeleteJust to be clear - do you miss violent fights with an ex?
ReplyDeleteLike Viv, I enjoyed it but I'm not sure that I get it.
The striking wording makes my mind travel as I questionin and listen to the cry of that owl.
ReplyDeleteExcellently crafted poem! =)
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Diane thanks!
ReplyDeletePamela
Viv I used his two lines as a `springboard`.
ReplyDeleteI was not copying his poem. This poem is about watching a `domestic quarrel`. And how the observer might feel.
Thanks for commenting.
Pamela
Ron Thanks for saying so.
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Thank you Derrick!
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Thanks so much umapoems!
ReplyDeleteThanks for visiting!
Pamela
Thanks pwf and their usage is supposed to be subtle.
ReplyDeletePamela
Tilly. Good heavens what are you thinking.
ReplyDeleteIf I were ever in a violent relationship I most assuredly would not write about it. I do not tend to write about my real life. Thanks for commenting.
Pamela
Thanks Mary. The cry of an owl can be quite eerie.
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Thanks so much Weasel!
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The crash of china against a stone wall! Not your normal love poem, but who-ever called Bukowsky normal. Nice Take
ReplyDeletesorrow flowing.. I can feel it in these words and feel them in my spirit today.
ReplyDeleteThank you for writing today.
I Wait Again.
Life repeats itself again and again. Like the owl reference and the crash and clash of breaking crockery.
ReplyDeleteElizabeth
Resounding! I like the way you used your springboard!
ReplyDeleteVery heart touching and emotional post---liked it.
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With best wishes.
Hemant
Hi Pamela.
ReplyDeleteI'm sorry; I seem to have completely misunderstood the poem. I didn't mean to cause any offence.
Regards,
Tilly.
Nice to take Bukowski and "watch the sorrow flow," my favorite line. Beautiful.
ReplyDeleteThanks Marian!
ReplyDeletePamela
Thanks Elizabeth and I find owls to be quite mysterious birds!
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Thanks Julie and domestic quarrels can be that way.
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Thanks for that Susan.
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Thanks Hemant.
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No harm done~Tilly . I was just a bit surprised is all.
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Thanks Deb and I am always happy to be a part of big tent,
ReplyDeletePamela
gosh i love his stuff!!!... i am so happy to see another buck poem... and you've drawn your own interpretation beautifully... ..."...So that we may watch the sorrow flow, from the unfaithful
ReplyDeletethe moon the stars and the world..." you know that happens all the time a beautiful evening, a relaxing walk, an open window... sound sleep
Who can resist looking up a poem based on a Bukowski? And you did him proud - love "watch the domestic fight with sentiment" - think he would've liked it also ...
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