"Life is the dancer and you are the dance."
Eckhart Tolle

Thursday, May 6, 2010

All in the crystal ball (Big Tent Poetry prompt #1)


can I read your fortune?

I’ll tell of things come to pass and things that will occur

pay me five dollars I am worth every cent

give me your hand darling

while I gaze into my crystal ball

you want to hear the good?

how about the bad?

never mind that darling

you have such beautiful eyes

they speak to me of sincerity and serenity

and all that you have endured

give me your heart and speak to me of

past times when things were once good

I think you were a queen in a past life

because you look like one now

stunning and majestic

you’ll make a fortune and find love in this life

I promise …

just make sure you leave the five dollars on the table

44 comments:

  1. Very good...I love the "jaded" way you wrote this! Yes, there are those who only tell you what you want to hear, and they are usually after something...

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  2. Thanks Cynthia. I missed you during napowrimo. Hope to see you over at the big tent.
    Pamela

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  3. They *always* collect first... ;)

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  4. I love the "never mind that darling," you really brought her to life!

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  5. bwarren,
    Thanks so much!
    Pamela

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  6. Nicely done, Pamela! Your fortune teller knows how to work her customer!

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  7. Thanks Paul. Yes she is very clever.
    Pamela

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  8. I like that bit of realism at the end after the mysticalness of the beginning.

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  9. Five dollars is really cheap, Pamela, but then money is so sordid!

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  10. Linda,
    Thanks for saying so.
    Pamela

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  11. I think you have done this before Pamela!
    That is Yvonne De Carlo.Yes one has to be old to know riveting stuff like this! Nice pic of you and Angie.

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  12. Rall,
    Maybe in another life. Yes she starred in The Greatest Show on Earth. I saw this pic and felt it appropriate. Thanks for the compliment on my pic with Angie.
    Pamela

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  13. "I think you were a queen in a past life" Yeah. I bet she never said that before, eh?

    Nice work.

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  14. Thanks Ron. They all say things like that, don't they?
    Pamela

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  15. I got a s sense of something much deeper behind this woman's words, as I read through, and felt a little unsure what it was. Then I re-read it and the comments and an image of Yvonne DeCarlo made it all too clear...Super stuff Pamela.

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  16. Hi. How are you doing? Thanks so much for commenting.
    Pamela

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  17. The right fortune always comes at a price. I enjoyed the humor in this.

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  18. Absolutely Francis. Thanks.
    Pamela

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  19. I like how the speaker looks into the crystal ball and then says never mind, let's see your eyes. A nice sense of the psychic's charade.

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  20. James,
    Thanks and it is all about charade isn't it.
    I enjoyed yours as well. Sad story though.
    Pamela

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  21. you got the voice down! i could hear her!

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  22. Thanks Carolee. I am glad you could.
    Pamela

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  23. Perfect! I remember hearing those words the one and only time I went to a fortune teller.

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  24. Pamela, this is beautiful. I would love to come to her to have her read my future.

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  25. Pamela you caught the voice good.-Irene

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  26. Susan,
    How did you feel about that? Thanks.
    Pamela

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  27. Uma,
    Wouldn't we all ;) Thanks.
    Pamela

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  28. Irene,
    Thanks and I am happy to see you over at the big tent.
    Pamela

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  29. Thanks for hanging tough with the prompt! It gave you a good return. I like the wryness of this.

    Welcome to the Big Tent!

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  30. Deb,
    I certainly did go through various ideas with this prompt. Thanks for that. And I am so happy to see everybody over at the big tent.
    Pamela

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  31. I love this poem, Pamela ... if I could join the circus, I'd be a fortune teller, too! She has the perfect job, tell the people what they want to hear!

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  32. Marianne,
    Thanks for the comment. And it does seem to be the perfect job doesn't it.
    Pamela

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  33. The pandering patter is wonderful!

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  34. Jason,
    Thanks for that and I enjoyed yours as well.
    Pamela

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  35. ha! Love this piece of manipulation...well done.

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  36. Thanks Linda. Appreciate it.
    Pamela

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  37. Strong poem with an individual voice. I chose a fortune teller role too - intersting to see how differently different poets went with different roles. I'm so enjoying finding all these poetry blogs.

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  38. Thanks for saying so Victoria.
    Pamela

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  39. I like how you voiced the fortune teller character in this poem...and how you let that voice belie the ego flattery and persuasion in her character. Well done.

    -Nicole

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  40. Nicole thanks and I enjoyed your Houdini poem.
    Pamela

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