can I read your fortune?
I’ll tell of things come to pass and things that will occur
pay me five dollars I am worth every cent
give me your hand darling
while I gaze into my crystal ball
you want to hear the good?
how about the bad?
never mind that darling
you have such beautiful eyes
they speak to me of sincerity and serenity
and all that you have endured
give me your heart and speak to me of
past times when things were once good
I think you were a queen in a past life
because you look like one now
stunning and majestic
you’ll make a fortune and find love in this life
I promise …
just make sure you leave the five dollars on the table
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Very good...I love the "jaded" way you wrote this! Yes, there are those who only tell you what you want to hear, and they are usually after something...
ReplyDeleteThanks Cynthia. I missed you during napowrimo. Hope to see you over at the big tent.
ReplyDeletePamela
They *always* collect first... ;)
ReplyDeleteThis is a trusting type ;)
ReplyDeleteI love the "never mind that darling," you really brought her to life!
ReplyDeletebwarren,
ReplyDeleteThanks so much!
Pamela
Nicely done, Pamela! Your fortune teller knows how to work her customer!
ReplyDeleteThanks Paul. Yes she is very clever.
ReplyDeletePamela
I like that bit of realism at the end after the mysticalness of the beginning.
ReplyDeleteFive dollars is really cheap, Pamela, but then money is so sordid!
ReplyDeleteLinda,
ReplyDeleteThanks for saying so.
Pamela
Derrick,
ReplyDeleteIndeed it is.
Pamela
I think you have done this before Pamela!
ReplyDeleteThat is Yvonne De Carlo.Yes one has to be old to know riveting stuff like this! Nice pic of you and Angie.
Rall,
ReplyDeleteMaybe in another life. Yes she starred in The Greatest Show on Earth. I saw this pic and felt it appropriate. Thanks for the compliment on my pic with Angie.
Pamela
"I think you were a queen in a past life" Yeah. I bet she never said that before, eh?
ReplyDeleteNice work.
Thanks Ron. They all say things like that, don't they?
ReplyDeletePamela
I got a s sense of something much deeper behind this woman's words, as I read through, and felt a little unsure what it was. Then I re-read it and the comments and an image of Yvonne DeCarlo made it all too clear...Super stuff Pamela.
ReplyDeleteHi. How are you doing? Thanks so much for commenting.
ReplyDeletePamela
The right fortune always comes at a price. I enjoyed the humor in this.
ReplyDeleteAbsolutely Francis. Thanks.
ReplyDeletePamela
I like how the speaker looks into the crystal ball and then says never mind, let's see your eyes. A nice sense of the psychic's charade.
ReplyDeleteJames,
ReplyDeleteThanks and it is all about charade isn't it.
I enjoyed yours as well. Sad story though.
Pamela
you got the voice down! i could hear her!
ReplyDeleteThanks Carolee. I am glad you could.
ReplyDeletePamela
Perfect! I remember hearing those words the one and only time I went to a fortune teller.
ReplyDeletea tug of words =)
ReplyDeletePamela, this is beautiful. I would love to come to her to have her read my future.
ReplyDeletePamela you caught the voice good.-Irene
ReplyDeleteSusan,
ReplyDeleteHow did you feel about that? Thanks.
Pamela
Janet,
ReplyDeleteThanks.
Pamela
Uma,
ReplyDeleteWouldn't we all ;) Thanks.
Pamela
Irene,
ReplyDeleteThanks and I am happy to see you over at the big tent.
Pamela
Thanks for hanging tough with the prompt! It gave you a good return. I like the wryness of this.
ReplyDeleteWelcome to the Big Tent!
Deb,
ReplyDeleteI certainly did go through various ideas with this prompt. Thanks for that. And I am so happy to see everybody over at the big tent.
Pamela
I love this poem, Pamela ... if I could join the circus, I'd be a fortune teller, too! She has the perfect job, tell the people what they want to hear!
ReplyDeleteMarianne,
ReplyDeleteThanks for the comment. And it does seem to be the perfect job doesn't it.
Pamela
The pandering patter is wonderful!
ReplyDeleteJason,
ReplyDeleteThanks for that and I enjoyed yours as well.
Pamela
ha! Love this piece of manipulation...well done.
ReplyDeleteThanks Linda. Appreciate it.
ReplyDeletePamela
Strong poem with an individual voice. I chose a fortune teller role too - intersting to see how differently different poets went with different roles. I'm so enjoying finding all these poetry blogs.
ReplyDeleteThanks for saying so Victoria.
ReplyDeletePamela
I like how you voiced the fortune teller character in this poem...and how you let that voice belie the ego flattery and persuasion in her character. Well done.
ReplyDelete-Nicole
Nicole thanks and I enjoyed your Houdini poem.
ReplyDeletePamela