"Life is the dancer and you are the dance."
Eckhart Tolle

Saturday, May 29, 2010

Sometimes it is ... big tent poetry #4.2 a revision

You said you were my lover

You looked inside my heart

And saw …

An anagram you could not decipher

Carefully jotting down every letter

You searched for someone who would help read it

No one understood and you almost gave up

But then you visited me one spring afternoon

To ask what it meant

waiting under the train trellis on a bench

I stared at you

realizing why you were my aphrodisiac

Your shabby hair once adored

Your sullen … sad bedroom eyes

your freshly cleansed body

give me back my anagram I need it for

next time round

14 comments:

  1. Suddenly, the realisation comes, Pamela!

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  2. Enjoyed how the word "anagram" represents all the subtleties and enigmas of your aphrodisiac!

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  3. Clever heartfelt piece, Pamela. I like them shabby, too. :)

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  4. Inventive metaphor, and delightfully complex to picture! Heartfelt and sincere, I enjoyed it, thank you.

    (And I guess if you were a tree, you'd be "a maple")

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  5. I KNOW this shabby, bedroom-eyed, freshly cleansed person! Sometimes you CAN go home again, but mostly, you can't. Give it to someone who knows how to decipher it. :)

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  6. Derrick
    I loved this prompt so much just had to write another.
    Pamela

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  7. GT thanks for commenting
    Pamela

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  8. I love shabby!
    Thanks Brenda.
    Pamela

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  9. Novaheart you know it. Thanks.
    Pamela

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  10. I have Joyce finally.
    After all these years!
    Pamela

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  11. It's that unsolved puzzle that keeps us coming back for more. I enjoyed this one Pamela.

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  12. This is a good one Pamela. Beautifully written.

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  13. Francis
    Attraction can be so deceptive can't it!
    Thanks for the comment!
    Pamela

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  14. Uma
    Thanks for saying so and stopping by!
    Pamela

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