"Life is the dancer and you are the dance."
Eckhart Tolle

Monday, April 11, 2011

"Shirt Pocket Words" NaPoWriMo #11-Wordle from "Beyond the Bozone"

 If the Eiffel tower is viewed from below on a gloomy day
then I’d rather be looking at the Taj Mahal,
but if blind we cannot see the cobwebs.
It’s a feeble influence felt between fingertips smooth or rough
that makes me laugh at dandelions in the yard.
Detecting what is essential to embrace my sensibilities, 
so as not to lose my corrugated mind in flurry without words.
Collection of phrases in my shirt pocket along with ash
haven’t yet made a journey for their destiny.
Scrambling triumphs are turns around
pages of dreamy thoughts that hum when words keep
pushing and shoving like a street brawl I haven’t witnessed yet.



Thanks for the wordle Brenda!
* used all except: hovels

30 comments:

  1. Pages of dreamy thoughts that hum... wonderful freeform on the Wordle, Pamela. This was a truly enjoyable, freeing read.

    Amy
    http://sharplittlepencil.wordpress.com/2011/04/11/finale/

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  2. Pamela, I am in awe. Your final two lines are my favourites.

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  3. You go to so many places with this to bring the words together into a compact, well written piece.

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  4. Corrugated cobwebs, Batman! This is good poetry! Even people who live in hovels will love it!

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  5. I like this line:

    Collection of phrases in my shirt pocket

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  6. Well executed wordle...you whirdled round the world! ~Brenda

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  7. I LOVE what you've done with Brenda's wordle prompt! "Corrugated mind, Scrambling triumphs, dreamy thoughts that hum." So many wonderful images. This is a beautiful poem.

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  8. Beautifully done! I like the way you put this together, maybe you could use 'Hovels' in the title.

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  9. Do you think so, Ron, ha ha ha!

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  10. Not sure where that came from, Tilly, I rarely wear shirts with pockets:)

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  11. corrugated mind? I have no idea how that came to me, Marianne.

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  12. I love the image of your shirt pocket filled with words and phrases.

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  13. Pamela - you are amazing! I think this just may be my favorite poem of yours to date! It just resonates! The first two lines pulled me in and the final two were just brilliant.

    Where DO you get your ideas?

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  14. I might ask you the same exact question, RJ, for me it is mostly what I have read, i.e. books, newspaper articles, some images I notice in my daily routine ... conversations I have and as in the case of this poem, I haven't a clue:)

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  15. I don't know what list of words you were given, but I never would have guessed this was a word list poem. It's a fantastic write, and I love the opening especially.

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  16. What a delicious poem, Pamela! Love the way you incorporated al the words.

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  17. The wordle list is above the poem, Gloria and thank you.

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  18. Delicious, oh my, thanks Mary.

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  19. Love the last three lines! Very lyrical.

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  20. Thanks Twitches and I loved your broken window poem:)

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  21. I like that "collection of phrases in my shirt pocket" that haven't made their journey yet. Words waiting to be written in a poem. And I really like that juxtaposition in the last lines of the "dreamy thoughts" and the words "pushing and shoving".

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  22. Wordles will do that to a person, Mr. Walker:)

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