"Life is the dancer and you are the dance."
Eckhart Tolle

Friday, September 10, 2010

big tent poetry #19 “Think of something you said. Now write what you wish you had said.”

Sure I’ll meet you there at six

I really didn’t feel like going

(Thanks just the same)

If I had missed that bus would it have been this way

as I stepped off a platform to transform myself

into another situation surrounding me in this world

I tapped my feet to the sound of

Engines roaring - silver shoes and black tights

While blue bandanas filled up the rooms tied in knots of yesterday

What if I had changed my mind at the last second

Do you think I’d feel specks of crystal lights that flash

round me as I’m consumed eternally

36 comments:

  1. Pamela, I really liked this poem. As I began reading it, I thought I knew where it was going (and found myself nodding!) but then it went off in a different direction and I felt myself emotionally chilled by the "specks of crystal lights." Strong writing!

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  2. Quite frightening how simple decisions can change our lives.

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  3. I'm wondering if the blue bandanas have something to do with gangland? But you're much too nice a girl for that!

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  4. If ifs and ands were pots and pans.....

    You found some marvellous words here: "knots of yesterday" etc.

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  5. this one got me. It slipped into a dreamscape all my own. Than you.

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  6. Mmmm... small decisions can cause spectacular endings...

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  7. Derrick good heavens! Gangs! I am terrified of those kind of people. No,I am referring to a handknit Mexican scarf from Oaxaca.
    Pamela

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  8. I also like "tied in knots of yesterday". It stopped me and suggested so many things that I could see those "specks of crystal lights" flashing all around me. Like this one Pamela,

    Elizabeth

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  9. Wonderful images presented here! Excellently crafted post! =)

    -Weasel

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  10. We all feel we have to do things we do not want to. I think we should give ourselves the freedom to decline without an excuse! Wish I'd remember that, LOL. A truly sparkling poem!

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  11. Strong images and evocative words. Beautifully written.

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  12. How often I have wondered "if I had missed that bus . . . " Fine images and fine poem.

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  13. We always seem to miss that bus. At least I do. Great poem.

    crooked window

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  14. What may have happened had you no missed the bus? Life will keep you guessing, enjoy the ride.

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  15. Wonderful. Love those last lines.

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  16. Tilly decisions can be so difficult sometimes!
    Pamela

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  17. Christopher thanks and thanks for visiting!
    Pamela

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  18. Thanks Elizabeth! This was an interesting prompt!
    Pamela

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  19. Diane that is so hard for me to do.Thanks!
    Pamela

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  20. Ha! So true Gautami! Thanks for that!
    Pamela

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  21. How right you are Amanda and thanks!
    Thanks for visiting!
    Pamela

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  22. Ah beautiful words my friend :D somehow it amused me in the beginning and wonderful ending this poem have! =D

    And here is a reward for you, time to spread the happiness!

    http://riikainfinityy.com/2010/09/11/happy-award-makes-you-happy3/

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  23. This seemed quite dreamlike, at the verge of turning into a nightmare...I enjoyed it!

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  24. I love the way you move from the mundane to the really out-of-the-ordinary: it's at once seamless and shocking.

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  25. Thanks riika and thanks for the award!
    Pamel

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