"Life is the dancer and you are the dance."
Eckhart Tolle

Tuesday, March 30, 2010

my soul RWP #120 (In this pic I saw death)

they come for my soul in the carriage

they have gathered, oh why can’t I live?

the black curtain has moved back

exposing me



my body is emaciated and wrinkled beyond recognition

starvation came to me slowly

to be spoon fed day by day

it couldn’t be done successfully (though they tried)



i veil behind eyes closed eternally

never to open yet again, no heartbeat

not at all to be heard from within

i want my soul to go somewhere temperate



that was the thing I loved

when I was amongst the living

they have perched around my carriage

am I ready to give my soul away?



 
 
 
 
 
 
 

The gathering by Alice Popkorn 

22 comments:

  1. This is harrowing in places. Beautifully done.

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  2. Hi Pamela,

    Who wouldn't want to go somewhere temperate?! I like that the birds have come to carry your soul to another place rather than as scavengers.

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  3. Thought provoking. Especially love the opening line.

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  4. I really like your take on the picture. It made me think of Dickinson's "Because I Could Not Stop for Death".

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  5. Anthony,
    It is always a pleasure to hear from you. Thanks! What's you take on RWP closing down? Let's keep in touch.
    Pamela

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  6. Derrick,
    Thanks! I also want the birds to take my soul someplace else. Thanks for stopping by.
    Pamela

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  7. Matt,
    Thank you so much! And thanks for stopping by. I am right now checking out on the poems that were submitted in Napowrimo and I loved yours.
    Pamela

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  8. SOL,
    Thank you so much for the nice comment. And thanks for stopping by.
    Pamela

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  9. Wayne, Wayne, Wayne! Where the heck have you been? I missed you stopping by. Are joining in Napowrimo? Thanks for the nice comment.
    Pamela

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  10. I love the depth and semi-finality - that thought remains even as the crows gather to abscond with the soul.

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  11. Susan,
    Thanks so much! I always enjoy you stopping by. This is a very dark image for me.
    Pamela

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  12. I love the question at the end. I felt the darkness of this one, too, Pamela. You do it justice!

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  13. Powerful as always...loved this!

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  14. Quite a spooky feeling to this, along with some very deep sadness. "Am I ready to give my soul away?" is such a haunting ending.

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  15. Karen,
    Thanks so much! I always appreciate your comments!
    Pamela

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  16. Lori,
    Thank you! You are so kind! I loved yours as well.
    Pamela

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  17. Cynthia,
    Thanks for the comment! I always enjoy you stopping by. I see you also saw sadness in this pic.
    Pamela

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  18. I really like the line "i veil behind eyes closed eternally." I keep thinking about the word veil... so well done.

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  19. James,
    Thanks so much! My husband even questioned me using veil as a verb. And I told him why not? It works here. Thanks for stopping by.
    Pamela

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  20. I echo Cynthia's comment -- this has a very spooky feel to it. And I *love* your last line ("am I ready to give my soul away?").

    -Nicole

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  21. Nicole,
    Thanks so much for your kind words. Thanks for your pw.
    Pamela

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