In all his dismay
Gazing at the cloudy night skyIn need of a respite
Many thoughts going through his awareness
Darkness and solitude
As if inside an empty skull
The eyes have been taken out
No longer able to perceive
Weary from the long journey
Time seems at a halt
The clock is motionless
Waiting for the alchemist to arrive
Armies on the western front
In the land full of irritated and angry peasants
No food for them to eat
No shelter from the merciless elements
If only slumber would come for a little while
Allowing me to feel rested and revitalized
Come to me sleep, cover my eyes
As time goes back in motion
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I particularly was taken with your descriptions in the second stanza, Pamela. Dismayed and waiting for sleep is a familiar feeling!
ReplyDeletePaul,
ReplyDeleteThanks for commenting and stopping by. I also need to start checking out some of the poems for this prompt.
Pamela
Excellent - especially the ending. I've known that feeling often.
ReplyDeletenicely done Pam...I felt it.....and Happy Birthday..(im late again)
ReplyDeleteAnthony,
ReplyDeleteThanks so much for stopping by and commenting. I too have experienced that feeling.
Pamela
Wayne,
ReplyDeleteThanks and I am glad you could feel it. Thanks for stopping by. And thank you for the happy birthday, better late than never.
Pamela
Very vivid poem.
ReplyDeleteOops. the url for my blog where my poem is posted is:
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Love your writings Pamela! Always so thought provoking
ReplyDeleteWell said. Wonder why sleepless hours so rarely give us pleasant images
ReplyDeleteYou've described in this poem to some degree what goes through my head at three in the morning sometimes: endless images, endless thoughts, and begging them to stop usually doesn't work. I call it monkey mind. And your poem suggests a cross of monkey mind and nightmare. Well done.
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Poemblaze,
ReplyDeleteThanks so much for stopping by and commenting. I now have to get around to reading everyone else's work for this prompt. It ahs been a busy week.
Pamela
Lori,
ReplyDeleteThanks for the lovely comment! And thanks for stopping by.
Pamela
Barbars,
ReplyDeleteThanks for commenting. I also have wondered why can't we think of pleasant things during those sleepless nights. But it is always the unpleasant things that have taken place at sometime or another.
Pamela
Nicole,
ReplyDeleteThank you so much! Monkey mind now that is an interesting concept. I hate my insomnia and it is impossible to make the bad thoughts go away when I experience it.
Pamela
Excellent imagery! It surprises me, always, that the dark isn't an easier place to be - since one can't see fearsome things that wander, even in the light. Really enjoyed this.
ReplyDeleteSusan,
ReplyDeleteThanks so much for stopping by and commenting. I am so glad that you enjoyed it! I too loved yours!
Pamela
Very nicely done. Outstanding imagery. As with all your work, Pamela, it leaves one slighty disturbed.
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The second stanza really stands out for me. It's just a very physical way of understanding this moment. Nicely done.
ReplyDeleteI really love the second stanza...I can see that clock...motionless. Nice take on this.
ReplyDeleteCristina,
ReplyDeleteThank you for commenting. And thanks for the compliment. There are many thoughts that come to mind from this photo.
Pamela
Jone,
ReplyDeleteThanks for commenting. The clock does seem motionless in this photo. I am glad you like it.
Pamela
Hi Pamela! I just love how you opened with "In all his dismay
ReplyDeleteGazing at the cloudy night sky
In need of a respite " Great imagery throughout. Kudos!
-Alejandra (redpetals04.wordpress.com)
Alejandra,
ReplyDeleteThanks for the compliment. Thank you for stopping by.
Pamela