"Life is the dancer and you are the dance."
Eckhart Tolle

Friday, March 4, 2011

"Reporter" big tent poetry #43-“read-it-over-someone’s-shoulder” wordle with bonus phrases


There is also the matter of
a typical question that will tangle me up
You smile as if to defy me, I let out a gasp
A flame burns in your boyish heart
like a parade to wake up the hiding world
As you slip one thigh over the other and
proceed to write the story …

29 comments:

  1. This is really sexy take on the prompt.

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  2. Concise, condensed, and full. Nice job.

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  3. Sensual and mysterious... I love it!

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  4. Love the line "like a parade to wake up the hiding world". And I like that the poem isn't necessarily what it seems to be.

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  5. Oh! The teasing that takes place!

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  6. Writing the story is a perfect and tittilating way to end this!

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  7. Lovely.

    I love your header. Beautiful.

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  8. You're such a tease.

    I liked the way you worked the words in to your poem this week. I wonder where this will lead.

    -Nicole

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  9. I strive for such brevity, but I can't shut up.

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  10. A many-layered piece - love it!!

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  11. "As you proceed to write the story" nice!

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  12. Wow! You managed the words in a whole lot less words than I did - and so well, too! ☼

    Anyway, I really love what you did with this prompt!

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  13. I like that I don't know what the story is.

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  14. Very good take on the wordle....last two line...dynamite. Vb

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  15. Eros and the promise of even more story...good for you.

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  16. I like sensual, I like implied eroticism...

    rivulets of space

    Due to Census work for the pas one month, I have not been able to visit and comment. I will be back with a vengeance after a day or two!

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  17. Very cool to use a word jumble with the poem. "Like a parade to wake up the hiding world." Very cool imagery.

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  18. Very sensual yet playful too.

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  19. Thanks to all for the lovely comments.

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  20. You amaze me, Pamela. So complete and so concise!

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  21. Thanks, Victoria, I like using the words concisely.

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  22. Delightfully sensual, but also I really like how we're at the same time seeing the middle of something and the beginning of something. A loaded moment.

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  23. Thanks so much, Joseph. Seems these words
    brought out a lot of sensuality with people.
    I can't say that is what I felt, maybe more
    of a defiance:)

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  24. Great poem, Pamela. This short poem says a lot! Thanks for the view over the shoulder. Nicely done.

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  25. I love the idea of the "typical question" tying up the speaker despite the fact that it's typical. That starts the poem off with a nice sense of the speaker's imbalance.

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  26. pretty advanced take. love it.

    I did try this time, here is mine:
    http://itistimetothinkformyself.blogspot.com/2011/03/big-tent-poetry-in-55-words.html

    Thanks for reading.

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