tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post4728924353175310290..comments2023-08-07T06:47:28.676-06:00Comments on Poetry with me ...: "Curtains of Existence" Big Tent Poetry - #47 revision promptUnknownnoreply@blogger.comBlogger19125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-33950158842889665132011-05-09T13:16:13.002-05:002011-05-09T13:16:13.002-05:00Thanks everyone for the nice comments.Thanks everyone for the nice comments.flauberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18424439866515694972noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-2357691449242055612011-05-08T00:04:49.679-05:002011-05-08T00:04:49.679-05:00A bit haunting, perhaps, but the vision of it impa...A bit haunting, perhaps, but the vision of it imparts something as real as we all sometimes would like to feel that it is. Causes one to contemplate.Reneehttp://reneejustturtleflight.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-70429642246699226652011-05-07T18:44:29.634-05:002011-05-07T18:44:29.634-05:00Hmmm.... I really do like the first one, which is ...Hmmm.... I really do like the first one, which is quite a bit darker than your revision, but I do think I like the rework better.<br /><br />MikeM. A. S.https://www.blogger.com/profile/04050723085916361298noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-13788503905933553012011-05-07T18:36:24.770-05:002011-05-07T18:36:24.770-05:00Lovelovelove "A thousand birds have come to w...Lovelovelove "A thousand birds have come to whisper" ...Debhttp://stoneymoss.org/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-38960734963140297792011-05-07T17:26:16.676-05:002011-05-07T17:26:16.676-05:00Agreed, this poem has more mysterious edge to itAgreed, this poem has more mysterious edge to itCathyhttp://www.thequietone.netnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-48048597610027962892011-05-07T13:02:30.713-05:002011-05-07T13:02:30.713-05:00A beautiful journey of words Pamela....a favorite ...A beautiful journey of words Pamela....a favorite for me of yours! :-)Carrie Van Hornhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11715648073882529202noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-16094661181479083692011-05-07T10:22:23.670-05:002011-05-07T10:22:23.670-05:00This is incredibly beautiful, and full of life and...This is incredibly beautiful, and full of life and truth, actually.nanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03445777687088584603noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-72509463554222783192011-05-07T05:38:41.565-05:002011-05-07T05:38:41.565-05:00Fabulous closing couplet.Fabulous closing couplet.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-10572691435588598732011-05-06T23:01:35.447-05:002011-05-06T23:01:35.447-05:00Having read and written several Dead woman poems, ...Having read and written several Dead woman poems, I'm not so sure this poem is all that dark. Certainly thought provoking, leaning toward the philosophical. Very imaginative and filled with your usual flowing language and beautitul imagery. Have to agree however, those last two lines are beyond good,<br /><br />ElizabethElizabethhttp://soulsmusic.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-62151411662875458272011-05-06T21:50:15.348-05:002011-05-06T21:50:15.348-05:00I loved the entire piece. That mment after death....I loved the entire piece. That mment after death. Yes. great last two lines.Henry Clemmonshttp://henryclemmonspoet.blogspot.com/2011/05/rock-star-big-tent-poetry-may-6-2011.htmlnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-70661043087908936182011-05-06T21:42:12.537-05:002011-05-06T21:42:12.537-05:00I like the first two lines. The imagery in "e...I like the first two lines. The imagery in "exposing, evaporating, extracting" is lovely - as if applying to the curtains and to your soul. I like how the last two lines reflect back to the first two; I imagined the thousand birds as the black curtains.<br /><br />RichardMr. Walkerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05507517064398624652noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-63735005812473964112011-05-06T21:18:38.809-05:002011-05-06T21:18:38.809-05:00I enjoyed the poem, and those last two lines are a...I enjoyed the poem, and those last two lines are amazing!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-38173122118539791222011-05-06T20:29:25.367-05:002011-05-06T20:29:25.367-05:00Beautiful piece... I love the alliteration and dep...Beautiful piece... I love the alliteration and depth of emotional imagery.Laurie Kolphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07494759781947881343noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-39995241314139545912011-05-06T20:04:42.934-05:002011-05-06T20:04:42.934-05:00Dark, yes, but hinting at something else..."h...Dark, yes, but hinting at something else..."hopeful" seems like the wrong word...but I don't know.... Very artistic and thought provoking. VbAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-20353438974657873172011-05-06T12:46:35.615-05:002011-05-06T12:46:35.615-05:00I am a fan of dark poems, Pam. I like this very m...I am a fan of dark poems, Pam. I like this very much! I love your descriptions!Maryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07366010389846904663noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-3822456064265862372011-05-06T12:45:40.962-05:002011-05-06T12:45:40.962-05:00I read it and read it again, to feel the intent an...I read it and read it again, to feel the intent and the meaning. And then I had to wonder on concurrent existences and the physics of time, realities of life, death, spirituality. Oh My Heck, Flaubert! You led me right into an inner philosophical discussion!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12460881702249079009noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-69682754841341433042011-05-06T12:22:15.844-05:002011-05-06T12:22:15.844-05:00Yes, there are some excellent lines in this, inclu...Yes, there are some excellent lines in this, including the last two.anthonynorthhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06680944720744601697noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-5780956519371087032011-05-06T09:36:13.586-05:002011-05-06T09:36:13.586-05:00I have to go along with Brenda. They are exception...I have to go along with Brenda. They are exceptional.Dave Kinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08430484174826768488noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-43443374123460865942011-05-06T06:44:21.226-05:002011-05-06T06:44:21.226-05:00The last two lines are amongst my favorite lines o...The last two lines are amongst my favorite lines of yours. You build toward them beautifully, and it makes sense. Dark, but gorgeous. <br />~Brendabrenda whttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00846306414656375463noreply@blogger.com