tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post1723751359493441455..comments2023-08-07T06:47:28.676-06:00Comments on Poetry with me ...: AnimalsUnknownnoreply@blogger.comBlogger17125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-62055030569724718432010-01-25T13:31:33.168-06:002010-01-25T13:31:33.168-06:00Thank you very much Nicole. I enjoyed doing the pr...Thank you very much Nicole. I enjoyed doing the prompt.flauberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18424439866515694972noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-9103235559871689382010-01-25T12:19:14.408-06:002010-01-25T12:19:14.408-06:00This poem almost reads like a somewhat surreal pai...This poem almost reads like a somewhat surreal painting for me, all the animals jumbled together and the unexpected ("chimpanzees disguised as antelope" and "'bah' understood in the gazelle's forest" are a few examples). My favorite line has to be "Graveyards full of tender salmon". Great effort on the prompt this week.<br /><br />-NicoleRaven's Wing Poetryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08576438868694047958noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-47675703420319156682010-01-23T22:26:26.502-06:002010-01-23T22:26:26.502-06:00Thanks Wayne haven't heard from you in awhile....Thanks Wayne haven't heard from you in awhile.<br />Thanks I appreciate the critique itflauberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18424439866515694972noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-9341997715604392652010-01-23T19:53:47.556-06:002010-01-23T19:53:47.556-06:00Hellooooooo Pamela...great poem...love the lines &...Hellooooooo Pamela...great poem...love the lines "graveyards full of tender salmon"...sooo good....also "crocus slumber through the marsh" is pretty good also and that is what happens in spring in the marshes at home.....take care and keep writingWayne Pitchkohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15376196523487344143noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-2576898909342589912010-01-23T15:11:32.596-06:002010-01-23T15:11:32.596-06:00Nathan thanks so much I am glad you liked it.
I re...Nathan thanks so much I am glad you liked it.<br />I really enjoyed this writing exercise.flauberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18424439866515694972noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-35037723969928479962010-01-23T14:46:18.687-06:002010-01-23T14:46:18.687-06:00WOnderful absurdity here -- I really like the line...WOnderful absurdity here -- I really like the line about chimpanzee disguised as antelope. And your last line is fantastic!Nathanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11552467037640904091noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-68541077421115790132010-01-21T17:20:37.543-06:002010-01-21T17:20:37.543-06:00To each and every one of you a great big thank you...To each and every one of you a great big thank you!<br /><br />Pamelaflauberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18424439866515694972noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-52526454139765457932010-01-21T17:19:36.182-06:002010-01-21T17:19:36.182-06:00Sue I am so happy that you loved it. Thank you.
P...Sue I am so happy that you loved it. Thank you.<br /><br />Pamelaflauberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18424439866515694972noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-57121672105885960402010-01-21T17:17:58.456-06:002010-01-21T17:17:58.456-06:00Barbara I am so glad you liked it! Now about the m...Barbara I am so glad you liked it! Now about the message lotus: It would reveal the many secrets we don't know about in the forest with the animals.<br /><br />Pamelaflauberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18424439866515694972noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-40266591072522149532010-01-21T17:15:32.275-06:002010-01-21T17:15:32.275-06:00Derrick thank you I throughly enjoyed doing it.
P...Derrick thank you I throughly enjoyed doing it.<br /><br />Pamelaflauberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18424439866515694972noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-52377634359082225502010-01-21T17:14:01.066-06:002010-01-21T17:14:01.066-06:00Mark thank you for your nice words. I really enjoy...Mark thank you for your nice words. I really enjoyed doing this piece.<br /><br />Pamelaflauberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18424439866515694972noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-38358876828827486072010-01-21T14:51:14.983-06:002010-01-21T14:51:14.983-06:00Enjoyable phrasing and imagery in this piece. A ro...Enjoyable phrasing and imagery in this piece. A robin sings in the robin bush - but, of course, where else? :) Love it.Tumblewords:https://www.blogger.com/profile/04279038951489894119noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-49691319294579020862010-01-21T14:46:04.496-06:002010-01-21T14:46:04.496-06:00Clever girl to theme your perceptions. If you can...Clever girl to theme your perceptions. If you can turn a word into anything, why not? My favorite is the robin singing in the robin bush, though I also like the message lotus (what would it have to say?)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-53087501051731182572010-01-21T11:25:25.033-06:002010-01-21T11:25:25.033-06:00Hi Pamela,
An inventive transliteration. I partic...Hi Pamela,<br /><br />An inventive transliteration. I particularly like the lines: 'Crocus slumber through the marsh/Graveyards full of tender salmon'.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00861397533660827678noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-40515951438838239872010-01-21T11:18:54.165-06:002010-01-21T11:18:54.165-06:00Thanks Therese I had a lot of fun with this. My st...Thanks Therese I had a lot of fun with this. My strategy was trying to find something that made some sense. So I had to switch the words sometimes. Again thank you.<br /><br />Pamelaflauberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18424439866515694972noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-9864044806333701632010-01-21T11:13:40.191-06:002010-01-21T11:13:40.191-06:00Fascinating poem....
I particularly like the dre...Fascinating poem....<br /><br /> I particularly like the dream-like quality of this. The mind wanders, asking a series of semi-related questions.Radio Nowherehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03676632225985024369noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-71984010761528418972010-01-21T10:36:06.067-06:002010-01-21T10:36:06.067-06:00This poem seems to me part "Peaceable Kingdom...This poem seems to me part "Peaceable Kingdom," with at least a slight promise that all animals might live in harmony (even if only in dreams). As a strategy of transliteration, I love how you invented a question to switch word groups from end to beginning in these two corresponding lines--<br />san àit' an d' rinn mo chuimhne dùsgadh<br />Are chimpanzees disguised as antelope?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com