tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post7544606760889958093..comments2023-08-07T06:47:28.676-06:00Comments on Poetry with me ...: "Clocks Outside of Rooms" Big Tent Poetry #46-mix things up a bit with poetry toysUnknownnoreply@blogger.comBlogger36125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-12454334865020387082011-03-28T16:05:35.816-06:002011-03-28T16:05:35.816-06:00Yes, it was tasmith.Yes, it was tasmith.flauberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18424439866515694972noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-70407903771474226462011-03-27T20:10:50.967-06:002011-03-27T20:10:50.967-06:00Love the closing lines: "Remembrances are le...Love the closing lines: "Remembrances are left in sequence\for innocence to gather up, to toss aside" Interesting exercise, wasn't it?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-48902764632384159572011-03-27T13:12:50.801-06:002011-03-27T13:12:50.801-06:00I'll probably never know, if those translation...I'll probably never know, if those translations are correct, nanflauberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18424439866515694972noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-16571064157879703762011-03-27T13:11:48.833-06:002011-03-27T13:11:48.833-06:00Thanks Brenda, much appreciated:)Thanks Brenda, much appreciated:)flauberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18424439866515694972noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-71855883003636278892011-03-27T13:11:05.133-06:002011-03-27T13:11:05.133-06:00Thanks Gautami, I not a quitter at anything in lif...Thanks Gautami, I not a quitter at anything in life:)flauberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18424439866515694972noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-12094594892126805182011-03-27T13:10:23.709-06:002011-03-27T13:10:23.709-06:00Thanks Cathy:)Thanks Cathy:)flauberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18424439866515694972noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-37903445176523101382011-03-27T13:09:59.103-06:002011-03-27T13:09:59.103-06:00I do think of the strangest things sometimes, Susa...I do think of the strangest things sometimes, Susan:) The dream about the tomatoes was one of the weirdest lately.flauberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18424439866515694972noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-60399907166411658362011-03-27T10:48:31.234-06:002011-03-27T10:48:31.234-06:00This flows as though you had written it without th...This flows as though you had written it without the tools -- so I'd say you did an excellent job with the prompt! Great poem.nanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03445777687088584603noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-90087439899559362862011-03-26T12:10:46.549-06:002011-03-26T12:10:46.549-06:00I was intrigued by the poem as a whole, with its d...I was intrigued by the poem as a whole, with its different languages, returns and departures from images we felt as having similar origins, and think it successful as it is.Brenda Clewshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01400505552810078505noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-32023519136307979812011-03-26T11:40:33.485-06:002011-03-26T11:40:33.485-06:00You did well. I tried but gave it up!
Here is mi...You did well. I tried but gave it up!<br /><br /><br />Here is mine:<br /><a href="http://firmlyrooted.blogspot.com/2011/03/homing.html" rel="nofollow">homing</a>gautami tripathyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04192356825699543613noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-25284310288290177752011-03-25T21:09:06.855-06:002011-03-25T21:09:06.855-06:00Love it, using the foreign words creates another l...Love it, using the foreign words creates another layer.Cathyhttp://www.thequietone.netnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-26039721291893248232011-03-25T20:25:03.856-06:002011-03-25T20:25:03.856-06:00Impressive piece of intriguing thoughts and words....Impressive piece of intriguing thoughts and words. Some fine lines and I know those came right from you. :)Tumblewords:https://www.blogger.com/profile/04279038951489894119noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-38420234709307643982011-03-25T19:49:24.297-06:002011-03-25T19:49:24.297-06:00Oh, it is, definitely going in different direction...Oh, it is, definitely going in different directions;)Thanks Jeanne.flauberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18424439866515694972noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-41952517188951844662011-03-25T19:45:30.134-06:002011-03-25T19:45:30.134-06:00Thanks Barb, if I had this to do over again, I mig...Thanks Barb, if I had this to do over again, I might change a few things:)flauberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18424439866515694972noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-56542725072436211312011-03-25T18:56:33.550-06:002011-03-25T18:56:33.550-06:00I really enjoyed this Pamela,it has so many direct...I really enjoyed this Pamela,it has so many directions. It leaves me thinking about time as related to us in a personal way, and time related to us in an ominous, unstoppable way.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-72867142297831279312011-03-25T18:46:02.743-06:002011-03-25T18:46:02.743-06:00I like the way you manage the multiple languages, ...I like the way you manage the multiple languages, sort of a call-and-response. <br />Wherever the clock engraved in the brick wall came from, it works. I'd hang on to it and its erosion.barbarahttp://briarcat.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-55487336083908261092011-03-25T17:18:52.998-06:002011-03-25T17:18:52.998-06:00Thanks Viv:) the first bit came from a poem I wrot...Thanks Viv:) the first bit came from a poem I wrote, awhile ago, but never posted, because I didn't care for it much. The last bit about the tomatoes came from a dream I had the other night, strange, I know. <br />As for the translators, none seem to be very reliable.flauberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18424439866515694972noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-77349766910077837152011-03-25T17:05:09.775-06:002011-03-25T17:05:09.775-06:00Your poem is like a Dali painting: it sent my mind...Your poem is like a Dali painting: it sent my mind off in all directions, trying to keep up with the thought processes. I enjoyed the linguistic gymnastics! Google is better than babelfish, but there's not much in it.vivinfrancehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07388722600118753457noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-34037501073286637282011-03-25T15:44:23.348-06:002011-03-25T15:44:23.348-06:00Thanks Joseph:) I should of all people know that t...Thanks Joseph:) I should of all people know that translators are not reliable, but it is all in the fun of poeming. I have written a few poems in Spanish,then have taken the same text and run it through google translator,what a muckety muck that turned into every time.flauberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18424439866515694972noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-66914090391799925192011-03-25T15:28:07.139-06:002011-03-25T15:28:07.139-06:00I could tell you where the inconsistencies are in ...I could tell you where the inconsistencies are in French, but I don't think it matters one whit. This is beautiful, one of my favorites of yours... those lines you began with are great themselves, and then the permutations you found from them really blossomed. Rock on. :)Joseph Harkerhttp://namingconstellations.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-5025528596472964432011-03-25T14:26:38.347-06:002011-03-25T14:26:38.347-06:00Understandable, Mary, I not thrilled with the resu...Understandable, Mary, I not thrilled with the results, since I don't speak Italian or French;)<br />therefore, I am not sure if the translations are correct.<br /><br />March 25, 2011 2:25 PMflauberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18424439866515694972noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-26446980357970584022011-03-25T14:16:03.536-06:002011-03-25T14:16:03.536-06:00Nicely crafted, Pamela. I pass on this exercise t...Nicely crafted, Pamela. I pass on this exercise though. Hard to do, but it was not my 'cup of tea.' LOL.Maryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07366010389846904663noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-42296035900938767122011-03-25T14:00:53.658-06:002011-03-25T14:00:53.658-06:00Thanks, Laurie, I am not totally satisfied with it...Thanks, Laurie, I am not totally satisfied with its turnout, but it was fun.flauberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18424439866515694972noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-38922094791909137172011-03-25T13:17:51.689-06:002011-03-25T13:17:51.689-06:00Pamela-
Brilliant and lovely piece w/ vivid imag...Pamela- <br /><br />Brilliant and lovely piece w/ vivid images... I like "the room doesn't worry"...<br /><br />~laurieLaurie Kolphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07494759781947881343noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-29876315024731979992011-03-25T12:51:35.562-06:002011-03-25T12:51:35.562-06:00Thanks vb, yours was quite amusing:)Thanks vb, yours was quite amusing:)flauberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18424439866515694972noreply@blogger.com