tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post4678713244478124605..comments2023-08-07T06:47:28.676-06:00Comments on Poetry with me ...: "He Sells Pinwheels" #25-NaPoWriMo-Wordle from Brenda WUnknownnoreply@blogger.comBlogger18125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-76133180782927694302011-04-26T11:38:37.945-05:002011-04-26T11:38:37.945-05:00Thanks to all for the nice comments. I am in a rus...Thanks to all for the nice comments. I am in a rush today, as well as yesterday.flauberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18424439866515694972noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-56521701113287106702011-04-25T18:56:38.799-05:002011-04-25T18:56:38.799-05:00What a wondrous creep....must visit and meet Brend...What a wondrous creep....must visit and meet Brenda and " wordle" !Dr. Pearl Ketover Prilik (PKP)https://www.blogger.com/profile/15506538737806033824noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-25869666765202747672011-04-25T18:17:29.407-05:002011-04-25T18:17:29.407-05:00Pamela, not a pretty picture, but certainly one we...Pamela, not a pretty picture, but certainly one we can all relate to because we have all, at one time or another, seen him, grabbed our childrens' hands and moved quickly away. You bring him to life and use the words well,<br /><br />ElizabethElizabethhttp://soulsmusic.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-86899282046064090282011-04-25T17:50:44.462-05:002011-04-25T17:50:44.462-05:00I enjoyed your take on the wordle...very fun to se...I enjoyed your take on the wordle...very fun to see a different picture painted with some of the same words! Well done, Pamela!!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-54595554492466408342011-04-25T17:27:56.273-05:002011-04-25T17:27:56.273-05:00I know that guy!
But really good poem. I really li...I know that guy!<br />But really good poem. I really like the cheap bottle of wine replenishing his nerve.M. A. S.https://www.blogger.com/profile/04050723085916361298noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-48498660269424823922011-04-25T17:13:53.114-05:002011-04-25T17:13:53.114-05:00Taut and powerful - such good images to describe h...Taut and powerful - such good images to describe him. Those last two lines are amazing - I love the pun in "Eternal Creep" - how it's both noun and verb. Another great one, Pamela.Mr. Walkerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05507517064398624652noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-66346804059761532572011-04-25T14:43:33.997-05:002011-04-25T14:43:33.997-05:00This made me cry for the tragic man with grey hand...This made me cry for the tragic man with grey hands. You've painted a magnificent portrait of this pitiful soul. Amazing use of the words, Pamela!Gloriahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08555391165844772063noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-86131637884444890332011-04-25T10:33:24.072-05:002011-04-25T10:33:24.072-05:00The words seem to have taken a few of us down a da...The words seem to have taken a few of us down a dark corridor. You really create the scene well in this piece Pamela. The image of him holding the pinwheels is haunting.Francis Scudellarihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01008685302028451297noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-18570774977215455842011-04-25T09:49:33.319-05:002011-04-25T09:49:33.319-05:00Well done ... I tried this and could not do it. I ...Well done ... I tried this and could not do it. I love "holding pinwheels in his grey hands … fragile as tissue paper." You did an amazing job of fitting "tissue" in your poem. That was one challenging word!Mariannehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17734900426632493796noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-86207063548697449252011-04-25T08:43:54.987-05:002011-04-25T08:43:54.987-05:00Pamela, The creep. You've captured him. When...Pamela, The creep. You've captured him. When he tires of pinwheels, he'll capture someone else. The words took me to a dark place, too. Yet they look so innocuous on their own. :)<br />~Brendabrenda whttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00846306414656375463noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-79127490265724684762011-04-25T06:57:33.744-05:002011-04-25T06:57:33.744-05:00You have created a vivid picture of the eternal cr...You have created a vivid picture of the eternal creep, Pam! I can picture him holding pinwheels!Maryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07366010389846904663noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-82453612903467638162011-04-25T05:49:11.327-05:002011-04-25T05:49:11.327-05:00I could have sworn I'd commented on this - it ...I could have sworn I'd commented on this - it is heart-wrenching. I can empathise with the mothers, but even more with the Creep - destined to be forever misunderstood.vivinfrancehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07388722600118753457noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-57034256732418055092011-04-25T05:03:24.687-05:002011-04-25T05:03:24.687-05:00One of your best. I didn't know the word lam. ...One of your best. I didn't know the word lam. I do now, so thanks for that as well.Dave Kinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08430484174826768488noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-30331422866403513462011-04-25T03:56:10.192-05:002011-04-25T03:56:10.192-05:00I love 'a life lived on the lam'.
Crackin...I love 'a life lived on the lam'.<br /><br />Cracking last couplet.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-38883446033206553452011-04-25T03:47:21.337-05:002011-04-25T03:47:21.337-05:00I was wondering how the pinwheels were gonna get i...I was wondering how the pinwheels were gonna get in there. Good use of diverse verbiage. Love "the eternal creep." Well done.Ron.http://rlavalette.wordpress.com/2011/04/25/napowrimo-25-2/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-31803257508500996232011-04-25T03:29:50.362-05:002011-04-25T03:29:50.362-05:00What a portrait you painted!What a portrait you painted!Jinksyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01686101468214361004noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-14529956470002219832011-04-25T02:47:13.314-05:002011-04-25T02:47:13.314-05:00I can see this man, feel sorry for him, empathise ...I can see this man, feel sorry for him, empathise with him for the fear he invokes in others. The sign of a good poem!vivinfrancehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07388722600118753457noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5898489019646958343.post-713952352864469532011-04-25T02:20:53.629-05:002011-04-25T02:20:53.629-05:00Not 'lovely', but vivid, and real...Not 'lovely', but vivid, and real...Stan Skihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11963655096635414472noreply@blogger.com